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評《悲》
ISSUE #9
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評《悲》
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ISSUE #9
CHAPTER 9 - 妳頭也不回的走
No Plagiarism!wS8MNNYYtv7NARC6Cg1Kposted on PＥNAＮＡ

第三句的 「的」 應改為 「得」 。

第四句的 「的」 應該刪除。

第八句的 「的」 應改為 「地」 。

此外大致上沒有問題。

總體來說，能夠扣緊主題： 「妳頭也不回的走」，但只能突出其中憤怒及無奈，並不能突出其中的悲。

可以改善的地方：

將無奈及憤怒的情緒轉化為悲，並將整個重心放於後方重點。

完。778Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ1CLyOcoIgz

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Last updated: Dec 29, 2017
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