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雜文集
ISSUE #8
Author: 荒玳
雜文集
Author: 荒玳
ISSUE #8
風（新詩）
No Plagiarism!2bDlC90WaBMPqeJi8As4posted on PＥNAＮＡ

§來源：之前的國文作業及創挑文。

【微調舊版】

你說我是風

是自由  不受拘束的

是豪放不羈的流浪者

但我說

因無地挪出我的居所

因無人收容我的心緒

遂成了飄泊不定的流浪者

/

你說我是風

可以到處遊樂  走馬看花

品賞奇山異水  異國風情

但我說

我匆促地自遠方來  又匆遽地往彼方去1719Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡDdzLYbreSQ

那些如煙佳景  只得一眼瞥別

/

你說我是風

春時  是溫和的楊柳風

蛙蟬鳴唱時  是沁爽的薰風

是殷勤傳播花粉的農人

是孩童放風箏時的玩伴

是大家所喜愛的

但我說

當癟莖折摧  我是枯槁蕭瑟的哀嘆

當寂夜雪飛  我是泠冽咆哮的朔寒

人們便會斥責我 

說我是善變的  是不解人情的

/

你說我是風

要和我做朋友

就算離別  也要等我回來

就算長久  也不會忘卻我

但我說

我是風

我從彼方來  又要向遠處去

我是去而不返的風

因而

成了煢獨孓然的流浪者

【微調創挑文】

恣意流徜在輕絮間遊走

歲月的蒼老卻捉你不住1719Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡZvpWxBxlWc

追隨偌大的煌炎  一點銀白的冰晶
/

傾聆百轉  滾珠綻蓮下淤泥的未眠

揀拾千迴  夕曛殘華一抹浮游的舊夢

輕嘆著怨愁百慨  一曲竹簫望你相唔言1719Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡqMD0gm1RIm

低詠著生離死別  荒垣燼墟是你受託的謳歌

兀自撰錄朦朧輓歌的殘簡  愛恨憎癡的瞬息  

唯願頷首垂簾   一笑置之1719Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡpcqZgu7Z52

/

今何來  復何適

尋不著你舊時的足跡  達不了你所在之處

天涯海角無一隅不為你的家 1719Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡWXqHQsv5u6

一草一露卻都不婉留你

/

你說  你將恆久銘心1719Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡwFYI0rzdqP

吹散了你和我的留念

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＊題外話：沒看到評論所以也不太曉得老師怎麼評，但就觀感上個人還是偏好前者的感覺，我才懶得管字用得怎麼樣ಠ_ಠ。

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