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《九鼎仙俠錄》試讀會！真心話大募集!
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各位 Penana 的道友、書評家好！

在下九霄九犽，目前正在連載傳統仙俠作品《九鼎仙俠錄》。主角陸雲舟「天生缺一脈」，正嘗試以凡俗武學《九鼎易筋經》打破偽仙設定，破局逆襲。

目前作品已經更新到第十一章（約 3.5 萬字）。雖然傾注了心血，但閉門造車難免有盲點。為了讓這部作品更精進、節奏更明快，誠邀各位道友化身「最嚴厲的審稿編輯」，幫我找出作品的優缺點！

不管是誇獎還是鞭策，只要是真心的建議，我都雙手歡迎！


  1. 投稿內容：請撰寫一篇 300字以上 的真心長評。
  2. 優化方向
    • 開局節奏：第一章的落魄懸崖古洞開局，有沒有吸引你讀下去的慾望？
    • 角色塑造：主角陸雲舟的「凡俗武學入道」設定夠不夠吸引？
    • 文筆與代入感：文字有沒有傳統仙俠的韻味？打鬥描寫（如書房大戰）夠不夠流暢？
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