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「亞撒西」的書評~創作診療室
ENTRY #15
Author: 雪晴
Published:
Mar 27, 2026
「亞撒西」的書評~創作診療室
Published:
Mar 27, 2026
ENTRY #15
《煉之鐵獄》
Author: 雪晴
Published:
Mar 27, 2026
1 Min Read
198 Words
No Plagiarism!raUwheNzkmMpcMgnvugTposted on PＥNAＮＡ 86Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡNMnIZ4W1FX

大家好

我是雪晴

作品名稱：煉之鐵獄

作品連結：https://m.penana.com/story/206549/%E7%85%89%E4%B9%8B%E9%90%B5%E7%8D%84/toc

86Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡGI5FflkY8v

希望大大看的範圍：

其實我是很想妳全部看完的

但如果一定一萬字以內的話

那就看第1-3章 5-9章吧

🙏🙏

86Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡC5IQJZAFPm

作品優點：其實這只是我第二次創作

說實話我說不出太多優點，

可能就是人物刻畫得比較細膩，

故事切入的角度比較深入，

以及比較真實，有靈魂。

86Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡmBwm2RJCXi

困難的地方：我覺得自己文筆跟不上我的想法，以及人物創造的問題，這個故事應該需要多一點的配角去鋪墊，但暫時還在努力當中。

86Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡoYwD2MTAxD
感謝大大🙏🙏🙏

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