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是書評喔
ENTRY #33
Author: Omega-3(秋雁)
Published:
Jan 7, 2026
是書評喔
Published:
Jan 7, 2026
ENTRY #33
【書評】女武神之約　起源物語
Author: Omega-3(秋雁)
Published:
Jan 7, 2026
1 Min Read
249 Words
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　　本作品的風格接近日式輕小說中的校園奇幻戰鬥類，其中小說的打戲處理尤為精彩。

　　節奏較快，但不太會影響閱讀。

　　個人覺得小遺憾的是顏色和氣味的描寫沒有到很多，然後有時候用字沒那麼精準。

　　比如下面這句：

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　　薰陶是褒義詞，而我看不出來有玩甚麼文字遊戲，因此會有些破壞整段的畫面。

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　　「她早上在來的路上被我處理了」可以換成其他表達方式，這樣感覺殺手沒甚麼壓迫感。然後紅彥直接揭穿這段，我覺得可以讓他先說嗅覺很靈，不然就是直接揍他。紅彥這樣表達會變得比較扁平。

　　這本小說已經更新到33萬字了，我很敬佩能寫這麼多的作者。如果是喜歡日輕的讀者可以去體驗一下這本小說創造的世界。

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