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(結算完了)【佳作狙擊手】 - 每一套作品都值得被尊重
ENTRY #44
Author: 風葉夢雪
Published:
Dec 8, 2025
(結算完了)【佳作狙擊手】 - 每一套作品都值得被尊重
Published:
Dec 8, 2025
ENTRY #44
推薦別人，小魚的異能英雄
Author: 風葉夢雪
Published:
Dec 8, 2025
1 Min Read
201 Words
No Plagiarism!tUXy1BoWoCY1f5WrSwQ3posted on PＥNAＮＡ

都來趁熱鬧，寫幾粒字，看了小魚一尾的異能英雄，感覺都不錯，有追看性、節奏明快。

230Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ3E8X30PsUA

推薦原因：

就是節奏吸引，看時有畫面感。六六在廣東話的發音動聽（這個可以是推薦原因嗎？）。

230Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡr0o6mXTfMo

改善空間：

故事中六六說的姨姨、女人可以有個名稱（但我不知道這手法是否一種鋪陳，增加神秘感）、如果戰鬥寫得細緻一點可以更好。還有開始時六六角度的顧然出現男生、男人等形容可以統一一點。

如果可以表示多一點場面背景就更好。

230Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡpwdKK0jEsD

我看別人的，總感覺每個故事都有它值得欣賞和學的地方。

https://android.penana.com/story.php?id=166247&from=searchpage

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