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不起眼的作者評文
ENTRY #48
Author: 夏日向日葵
Published:
Aug 15, 2025
不起眼的作者評文
Published:
Aug 15, 2025
ENTRY #48
《致我們的生命狂想》評文
Author: 夏日向日葵
Published:
Aug 15, 2025
1 Min Read
345 Words
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其一句

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“橘子就在門口抓門，他們很激烈即使疼痛即使不適也沒法阻止他們，質量不好的床因搖晃在作響。”

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“橘子就在門口抓門，他們很激烈，即使疼痛，即使不適也沒法阻止他們，質量不好的床因搖晃在作響。”

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幻想殺人時的快感得以解脫現實的苦難vs用一次次的痛苦來享受別人的片刻關注和痛楚帶來的解脫。

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這個想法很好，不過有些句子很長，可以斟酌分成多段。

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可以在多一點對於那種“興奮”的感覺，善用譬喻、擬物，例如：

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幾簾鮮血自一道道蜿蜒的血痕中綻放，不像彎彎流水，反而像是極光般低落。

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痛快，無論是失血帶來的耳鳴還是眼前模糊的現實都讓人感到痛快。

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以上

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說實話以前我也寫過類似的文章，不過後面因為軟件問題被鎖住找不回來了。

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在寫我那篇文時，我非常注重美感，無論是血泊、作案手法、人物樣貌，我都寫出美的不切實際的感覺。

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所以看這篇文時，一直給我種恍如隔世的感覺。

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一直在講我的事抱歉(⁎⁍̴̛ᴗ⁍̴̛⁎)

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（純屬個人觀點，如有冒犯抱歉🙇‍♀️🙇‍♀️💞）

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