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人在做天在看！你在寫我評判！【試水第一期】（出題者到5／16）
ENTRY #44
Author: 商澐
Published:
Mar 16, 2025
人在做天在看！你在寫我評判！【試水第一期】（出題者到5／16）
Published:
Mar 16, 2025
ENTRY #44
【出題者】海棠青塚
Author: 商澐
Published:
Mar 16, 2025
1 Min Read
282 Words
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簡介：中原紛亂多年，戰亂不止，景蕭、陵冕各據東西二方，漸成鼎立之勢。

 「為人臣，當從一而忠，鞠躬盡瘁。為官者，當無愧天下，不負萬民。」，從莫歌陵記事以來，便知道自己是要做保家衛國的大將軍，所以哪怕是死，也不會辜負這句教誨。

在景蕭人眼裡，屈少勤是個倒霉鬼，本該是最受寵的皇子，卻因父皇的早死，皇位被奪，母妃被囚，最後還被送往鄰國為質。

世人卻不知，在踏入陵冕的那個雪夜，他終於遇到自己此生的救贖……

 【元帥X質子】471Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡTPFpB111tK

連結：https://www.penana.com/story/173993

因為留言少所以才來創挑這裡試試，這個作品我分了四卷，但目前只寫完第一卷，而且我覺得第一卷是最平淡的一卷，對第一卷的文筆描述等我也覺得自己沒有做得很好，還是希望有人可以提一點意見，或者是看第二卷，對比一下是不是有變比較好看。

471Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡGSIaG0TpVT

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