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整理了一些剛開始寫有點怪，不通順的地方。

修飾並加強了人物心理的描繪。

還有刪除了很多贅字。


總而言之，這是我第一本小說(未出版)的第一卷。

整理的很辛苦。

不知道大家覺得寫得如何呢？


小說連結：(進去應該會顯示第一卷，如果不是那就是我給錯連結了)

https://www.penana.com/story/150214/%E5%89%8D%E4%BA%BA%E7%A8%AE%E6%A8%B9-%E5%BE%8C%E4%BA%BA%E4%B9%98%E6%B6%BC/issue/1

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