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不勝丸還活着
ISSUE #121
Author: 不勝丸
Published:
Oct 23, 2024
不勝丸還活着
Author: 不勝丸
Published:
Oct 23, 2024
ISSUE #121
明月幾時有
No Plagiarism!DfWOH9wlvmsBEInQ7Eqcposted on PＥNAＮＡ

太好了！我又發現了自己的缺點！我寫作時比較喜歡用對白去解釋故事背景和發展，這樣雖然會寫得比較輕鬆，但同時會導致故事顯得單薄乏味。而且，角色不停說話會令讀者覺得吵鬧。怪不得我之前重覆翻看自己的故事後，會感到不舒服，原來問題在這啊！

發現問題後，就到了改正的時候啦～我會嘗試把不必要的對白刪掉， 添加更多場景和人物之類的描寫。加油加油！！

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