整本書看下來，剛開始看第一篇的時候，我還以為會寫一個小女孩在天堂大戰300回合的故事^_^、第二片看的時候才知道是寫時空輪迴的
真的感覺莉婭好慘、每天都要死一遍。
總的來說看下去的話 現在第八章還沒出現主線劇情，就是感覺像景物描寫 ，外貌描寫感覺寫太多了、沒有那種可以讓人引人入勝的感覺。
希望那方面能改一下。雖然說說話比較難聽，就是寫太平淡了前面。
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你們會如何面對失敗？
Published:
Aug 8, 2024
ENTRY #28
莉婭的一天:評價
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Gay里基氣
Gay里基氣
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Aug 8, 2024
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