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新舊第一章大比拼！豐厚賞金！
ENTRY #10
Author: 森重光
Published:
Jun 2, 2024
新舊第一章大比拼！豐厚賞金！
Published:
Jun 2, 2024
ENTRY #10
新版
Author: 森重光
Published:
Jun 2, 2024
1 Min Read
260 Words
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新舊兩版都已閱畢，私以為新版整體塑造上更勝幾分。

新版對於主角墨守晨有更多描寫，還有兩位社員的談話，使得故事整體進程會更加流暢自然。

舊版因為登場人物嚴格說來只有墨守晨，劇情會讓我覺得沒有什麼醞釀就突然殺出怪物襲擊過來。新版則透過社員的對話提及「怪物出現」，再透過社員視角「工友樣貌異常」，讓接下來的襲擊有事前做好最低限度鋪墊，沒有舊版的突兀感。

雖然很常聽「要盡快抓住讀者眼球」這說法且我也認同，不過我還是認為衝突的發生前有所鋪墊，讓它更自然地展現出來會更好。

硬要說的話，我覺得新版墨守晨那句「放棄不是勝利條件」喊出來略顯中二就是，在心裏想還好，喊出來就有種在看特攝片的感覺。

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