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創挑專區
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寂魚
創挑專區
Author:
寂魚
ISSUE #35
約好的,我們八十歲要認得對方《魚魚創挑第六期》#38
No Plagiarism!fPQzKPOQEWOfR6HCl0phposted on PENANA 作品:《魚魚創挑第六期》 連結8964 copyright protection31PENANAVNz4RYzTJQ 維尼
▌#38 約好的,我們八十歲要認得對方8964 copyright protection31PENANA6GO2oYfJuA 維尼
▌類型 小說8964 copyright protection31PENANABj1nCpMJyL 維尼
▌作者 逸昌8964 copyright protection31PENANAnXOor2xTha 維尼
一、通篇僅只有582字,但在用詞上十分難以閱讀,比如「每一句都出現大哥哥」這個問題。魚建議:不妨第一次出現大哥哥後,後面用他來代稱。35Please respect copyright.PENANAxg04SnmBLp
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二、接續是錯字的問題,「樹葉」打成了「四葉」、「罅隙」這個詞非常少人在用,除了公文上比較常見,小說幾乎看不到這個詞。35Please respect copyright.PENANApzzYu194Ds
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三、最後一句,即便我們忘記了彼此,但一定不會忘記這個約定。讀起來有點怪裏怪氣的味道存在。35Please respect copyright.PENANADzPZA1lWHA
首先,你都忘記對方了,那你那個約定不會忘記,是記得哪個部分?35Please respect copyright.PENANAdBkpf8SKOb
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以上,個人讀後觀。8964 copyright protection31PENANAFmNIyXxWVu 維尼
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