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創挑專區
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寂魚
創挑專區
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寂魚
ISSUE #35
約好的,我們八十歲要認得對方《魚魚創挑第六期》#38
No Plagiarism!GsO2lmwbcx7vgcEjJMxKposted on PENANA 作品:《魚魚創挑第六期》 連結8964 copyright protection33PENANAg0ZLj0ZlBx 維尼
▌#38 約好的,我們八十歲要認得對方8964 copyright protection33PENANAjet2UfeikE 維尼
▌類型 小說8964 copyright protection33PENANAM1hDc3IkYp 維尼
▌作者 逸昌8964 copyright protection33PENANAQ965q8sr1i 維尼
一、通篇僅只有582字,但在用詞上十分難以閱讀,比如「每一句都出現大哥哥」這個問題。魚建議:不妨第一次出現大哥哥後,後面用他來代稱。37Please respect copyright.PENANAPnazkpi5i5
37Please respect copyright.PENANAojWVwV4883
二、接續是錯字的問題,「樹葉」打成了「四葉」、「罅隙」這個詞非常少人在用,除了公文上比較常見,小說幾乎看不到這個詞。37Please respect copyright.PENANA9RNw3ZjDtV
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三、最後一句,即便我們忘記了彼此,但一定不會忘記這個約定。讀起來有點怪裏怪氣的味道存在。37Please respect copyright.PENANAoNnu2YKoX6
首先,你都忘記對方了,那你那個約定不會忘記,是記得哪個部分?37Please respect copyright.PENANAjy7RXuNNSP
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以上,個人讀後觀。8964 copyright protection33PENANAARCJ1AcMnO 維尼
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