No Plagiarism!TOJkCMWpAIJpSXT6J9zaposted on PENANA 大家好,今天我將爲《白與黑的世界》再次留下心得。8964 copyright protection532PENANAsS0XUsdY18 維尼
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首先,依然不厭其煩的,先説明我對於心得的想法。8964 copyright protection532PENANAn1n6pJPxBU 維尼
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在這個寫得好並不代表一定有人氣的嚴苛環境下,我希望心得不只是單純挖掘作者可進步的地方,還希望作者能夠獲得動力完成作品,甚至……能替這部作品召來更多讀者。8964 copyright protection532PENANAckkEzwr0MA 維尼
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有鑒於此,本心得將會分爲兩個部分:8964 copyright protection532PENANAKpFe1OXAjh 維尼
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1)寫給讀者的宣傳式心得8964 copyright protection532PENANA6TRZ38NZXf 維尼
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事不宜遲,現在開始。8964 copyright protection532PENANAonQLplZ0NF 維尼
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首先,《白與黑的世界》是個怎樣的故事呢?就讓我娓娓道來……8964 copyright protection532PENANApkrrZtvSDz 維尼
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神,打算毀滅世界。8964 copyright protection532PENANAz2VJRWsJlL 維尼
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諾亞,想要令神改變心意。8964 copyright protection532PENANAdzLz78wkVo 維尼
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於是,小白與小黑被派往下界,就只是爲了尋找一個理由……8964 copyright protection532PENANACFx203MTnW 維尼
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能夠説服神放棄滅世的理由。8964 copyright protection532PENANAJPN3rjSRz8 維尼
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就像書名所説的,這是白與黑兩人的治愈系奇幻冒險。8964 copyright protection532PENANAweJpN7M2rQ 維尼
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他們將周游列國,遇見不同的人類與獸人,遭遇各種衝突,展開一段有點腐味的奇幻旅程。8964 copyright protection532PENANAXugmh3x3Pj 維尼
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而全書最重要的兩名角色,分別是小白和小黑。8964 copyright protection532PENANAMz92CGWgfZ 維尼
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小白,顧名思義,象徵純潔白净。這位角色也被定位成聖母型角色,在故事裏深受小屁孩們的喜愛。但他其實失去一段記憶,也不記得羽翼爲何有傷痕。8964 copyright protection532PENANAYdRQvUE0T1 維尼
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聽説以後小白還有機會黑化,想看聖母角色黑化的讀者們,可別錯過了!8964 copyright protection532PENANADj9oiRBgWt 維尼
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然後是小黑,身體强壯但性格急躁,并且討厭小屁孩。而他並沒失憶,甚至清楚知道小白失去的那段記憶,並因此發誓會永遠守護對方。8964 copyright protection532PENANAp8jkW1UJgW 維尼
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究竟兩人以前發生過什麽事呢?他們最後又能否找到「理由」?世界會不會真的被神毀滅?8964 copyright protection532PENANAv6QwAdntcA 維尼
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歡迎點擊連結前去閲讀:https://www.penana.com/article/8147688964 copyright protection532PENANAZanJR1vaKW 維尼
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由於作者文繪雙修,作品内文配有大量插圖,如此特別的作者可謂非常少見。加上小白小黑都是美型角色,作品處處又散發著一股男男之味,喜歡這種類型的讀者們可別錯過了!8964 copyright protection532PENANA0vCBxh0Ck8 維尼
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宣傳式心得就寫到這裏。8964 copyright protection532PENANAfnuQ6K8euC 維尼
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2)寫給作者的分享式心得(含劇透)8964 copyright protection532PENANA44C3H893me 維尼
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這裏建議重溫以前寫給這部作品的Q&A心得:https://www.penana.com/article/10751428964 copyright protection532PENANA3ZJstJ0LfM 維尼
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之前提過的前傳過渡至正傳後,畫風突變的問題,目前看來作者已經接受建議,將前傳放進正傳後緩緩帶出,可喜可賀。8964 copyright protection532PENANA1emYVCOkc4 維尼
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但也因此產生了另一個問題,這個就遲點再談。8964 copyright protection532PENANAiUTwEtuBuf 維尼
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還有閲讀順序的問題,作者也采取解決措施,我這次重讀眼睛不用跳來跳去,避免了視覺疲勞的問題,再次可喜可賀。8964 copyright protection532PENANAHPG7JTGxm1 維尼
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接下來,就來談談爲何我會再次選擇為《白與黑的世界》寫多一次心得。8964 copyright protection532PENANA64m5XqZW75 維尼
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原因,就是因爲作者參加了我的《從書荒之中拯救我吧!》創挑……沒啦!只是趁機打個小廣告。8964 copyright protection532PENANArxodltgnXB 維尼
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其實是因爲我喜歡閲讀書評,但不是每則書評,而是我所閱讀過的作品的書評。8964 copyright protection532PENANADUFN8IP5es 維尼
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過去這段時間,我閱讀過久樹、阿掌還有鈴鈴卷對這部作品的評論。8964 copyright protection532PENANArfFS0iKwUr 維尼
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然後我就開始思考,如若是我,那我會如何寫出《白與黑的世界》?8964 copyright protection532PENANA8mUenk2vzG 維尼
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而這,也跟上面提過的新問題有關。8964 copyright protection532PENANAXVIGn4AsKA 維尼
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以大方向來説,目前《白與黑的世界》初期最大的問題,在於遲遲不出發去冒險。8964 copyright protection532PENANAlJTKTTNtbo 維尼
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臨出發前的小屁孩們送行劇情,感覺作者想要展現出人物性格與特質,讓讀者摸清小白與小黑的個性,拉近與角色們的距離感,才一起展開冒險。8964 copyright protection532PENANA0vpugBFbPW 維尼
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但説實話,我閲讀完畢後,仍然感覺有距離感。換句話説,效果非常有限。8964 copyright protection532PENANApNC7wvLhHr 維尼
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對,小白與小黑對我來説非常有距離感,無法產生共鳴,也因此無法提起想跟兩人一起冒險的興致。8964 copyright protection532PENANAWks7EHU8ER 維尼
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就像上面説過的,這是將前傳劇情融入正傳後產生的新問題。8964 copyright protection532PENANAlGMWeZKbwk 維尼
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這兩人曾經歷了一些重要的事情,小黑知道但我不知道,也就是説讀者與主角的認知不平等,因此產生了距離感。8964 copyright protection532PENANAbTveB08UZd 維尼
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而小白雖然失憶,但一開始的人設過於完美,完全親近不了,也是有距離感。8964 copyright protection532PENANAzxbNN3pstS 維尼
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要我跟他們一起展開冒險?總感覺好陌生……還是不了。8964 copyright protection532PENANAzXDiKjVetF 維尼
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那要如何同時解決「遲遲不出發」和「感覺好陌生」的問題呢?8964 copyright protection532PENANAgcUFKrzLDH 維尼
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這個命題,當我閱讀了上面説過的幾則書評後就一直在思考了。8964 copyright protection532PENANAMgeV8er8CA 維尼
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如果我是作者……8964 copyright protection532PENANAojoAT7KHpl 維尼
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看好了,我説如果我是作者,並沒説我的方法一定正確,就是説如若是我本身寫這部作品,那麽我的作法將是……8964 copyright protection532PENANAS94g7UyMuH 維尼
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增加一位人類主角,有必要的話,甚至可將小白與小黑設爲主要配角。8964 copyright protection532PENANA6GPXDnfOmE 維尼
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我覺得一開始的游醫團就是很好的選擇,可以讓少女游醫或是什麽也不懂的少年當主角。8964 copyright protection532PENANA6963UH3JcO 維尼
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故事一開始,我會安排新主角遭遇受傷的小白,就能解決「遲遲不出發」的問題,畢竟白與黑已經在旅程中。8964 copyright protection532PENANAfqv439cZmC 維尼
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由於這位新主角什麽也不知道,更不知道白與黑的過往,換句話説主角與讀者的認知平等,如以一來也能解決「感覺好陌生」的問題。讀者也比較願意跟新主角一起,加入小白與小黑,踏上一段冒險。8964 copyright protection532PENANAktcEKzl4lN 維尼
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同時解決「遲遲不出發」和「感覺好陌生」的問題,這是我個人的答案。8964 copyright protection532PENANA1luLHner4R 維尼
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新主角可謂「引導型角色」,引導讀者去認識擁有許多過往的角色。8964 copyright protection532PENANAfZu2Tw2Rg8 維尼
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放眼當今的作品,就有幾個例子。8964 copyright protection532PENANAMKrwlwOKJU 維尼
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手冢治虫的《多羅羅》,主角百鬼丸就是擁有悲慘過往,很難讓讀者親近的角色,所以加了「引導型角色」多羅羅。8964 copyright protection532PENANA8l50Fn7Mdr 維尼
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《銀魂》裏的眼鏡新八也是此角色類型,引導讀者認識擁有豐富過往的銀時。8964 copyright protection532PENANAk0Zb4S6wsq 維尼
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網絡小説《天廬風雲》,主角是步入中年的英雄,作者安排了「引導型女主」帶領讀者認識他。8964 copyright protection532PENANAnVHNmNJKJM 維尼
(話説還有哪位老人閱讀過《天廬風雲》?歡迎自曝年齡。)8964 copyright protection532PENANA587V09VsFJ 維尼
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縱觀許多大熱作品,配角比主角受歡迎的比比皆是。也許加個新主角,小白與小黑反而能更加發光發熱也説不定?8964 copyright protection532PENANAQ75iF8ePRh 維尼
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當然,以上純粹只是個人的想法,當作一個「Think outside the box」的意見。8964 copyright protection532PENANALr2vnZCYhZ 維尼
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畢竟有時傾注太多感情於角色,反而會形成盲點,也許可以試試看適當的抽離?8964 copyright protection532PENANALS57noSLzN 維尼
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就寫到這裏,祝作者創作愉快!8964 copyright protection532PENANARt03d2bMsN 維尼
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