No Plagiarism!t8IVPoV1un3j0hRzO0BJposted on PENANA 一定新版!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!8964 copyright protection434PENANAxGLkw5xIpt 維尼
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1)請問你閲讀至第一部的哪一章?8964 copyright protection434PENANAz75Cas1232 維尼
上次寫完書評後還有繼續看喔,從75章上,一直看到250章下,然後今天又補了除付費以外的全部章節(269下)8964 copyright protection434PENANAj345QlZxqv 維尼
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(我不是在考試嗎?怎麼都在看書?都怪黑正的半蟲戰機太好看)8964 copyright protection434PENANADLL2eqWZKb 維尼
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(另外說一聲抱歉,我是真的窮,沒錢買付費章節QQ(我真的很需要錢錢OuO8964 copyright protection434PENANAaGHwOmGmjE 維尼
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2)請問你最喜歡哪些角色?8964 copyright protection434PENANAecXcfTvwNl 維尼
看了新版的第一章後,從睦斂威轉到了默守晨,有種受轉攻的感覺OuO8964 copyright protection434PENANAomnLJY26vd 維尼
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還有依舊沒變的楊旭娜,這次我就直說了,蘿莉Saikou!!!8964 copyright protection434PENANADLXIEf1vj7 維尼
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(沒討厭的角色,第三題就不答了)8964 copyright protection434PENANAlpx5RsBeum 維尼
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5)請問你最想凑合哪一對CP?(可以發揮創意,拆散CP,甚至男男或女女)8964 copyright protection434PENANA1mXuclIe1d 維尼
還是和上次一樣,睦斂威跟默守晨!8964 copyright protection434PENANA9WsbA88cjh 維尼
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看了新版的第一章後我已經想像得出他們愛愛的情節了!麻煩這些情節在我的腦中待久一點438Please respect copyright.PENANA1ptq7PL35n
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(欸不是我今天要考數學)8964 copyright protection434PENANAsoSm9rOOFo 維尼
(好了,考完了,炒了,他們愛愛的臆想還在我的腦中揮之不去OuO)8964 copyright protection434PENANA1YJ1YwO4pg 維尼
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6)請問你最喜歡哪一場戰鬥?8964 copyright protection434PENANAiKp47Fs9Or 維尼
就是開頭那一場,太刺激了,建議再來一張床(?8964 copyright protection434PENANAIHvwxxjZA4 維尼
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8)請問這部作品的哪些優點最吸引?8964 copyright protection434PENANAoAJBnMO0hX 維尼
角色之間的互動都好好看!感覺比戰鬥場面還要好看。8964 copyright protection434PENANA1KgkmrZXFl 維尼
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9)請問這部作品的哪一點還可以再改進?8964 copyright protection434PENANAD0ZLWs2G1J 維尼
(請別浪費時間寫出目前已知的缺點,阁下的时间非常宝贵。)8964 copyright protection434PENANAWWWxAJRh1C 維尼
已知缺點:劇情混亂、對白太多、初期角色太多、節奏緩慢沉悶、標點符號問題、台詞中二、主角不突出、篇幅太長、文筆配不上插圖、描寫太細緻、戰記卻沒有大場面的戰爭、與想像的蟲人不符合、不喜歡故事題材。8964 copyright protection434PENANAq1P0WvPK7U 維尼
沒有睦斂威跟默守晨的BL情節(差評(建議出同人,改名半床戰記8964 copyright protection434PENANANMzwx8YT0j 維尼
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至於我投新版的原因都很明顯了吧(那就不多說了(先去流鼻血了8964 copyright protection434PENANATzFhLf5ZKa 維尼
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