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大家好,連續幾天在變態大學接觸各式各樣的變態後,我終於成功脫逃,並將爲Happy喵的《變態大學 University of Perversion》寫下心得。8964 copyright protection371PENANAVVqe689iB0 維尼
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首先,依然不厭其煩地先説明我對於心得的想法。8964 copyright protection371PENANAtKZaA5qnsY 維尼
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在這個寫得好並不代表一定有人氣的嚴苛環境下,我希望心得不只是單純挖掘作者可進步之處,還希望作者能夠獲得動力完成作品,甚至……8964 copyright protection371PENANAEKR4ctGuSb 維尼
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……能夠讓心得替這部作品召來更多讀者。8964 copyright protection371PENANA5tYpLzs0OC 維尼
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有鑒於此,本心得將會分爲兩個部分:8964 copyright protection371PENANAPckvidNO6J 維尼
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好巧不巧的,抽完籤當夜,這部作品被分配給我後,就看見Happy喵在PENANA官方Discord説了以下兩句話:8964 copyright protection371PENANA6i91Ww3yBP 維尼
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「我要榨乾黑正的幣幣」和「我唔鍾意蟲蟲」。8964 copyright protection371PENANAH04agMOKhb 維尼
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很好。8964 copyright protection371PENANARvTm8BJ6Ra 維尼
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我馬上決定以非常嚴謹的眼光,並以充滿個人風格的方式來寫下心得,甚至為此潛入了變態大學。8964 copyright protection371PENANAO3sDUBnra0 維尼
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事不宜遲,現在開始。8964 copyright protection371PENANAugITsR6ikg 維尼
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1)寫給讀者的宣傳式心得8964 copyright protection371PENANAd1yTdcKVQ5 維尼
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首先,《變態大學 University of Perversion》是個怎樣的故事呢?8964 copyright protection371PENANAufWnK9TP0s 維尼
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根據我潛入之後的觀察,這是一個關於男主角進入學校,立志成爲變態,並結識一大堆變態角色的變態故事。8964 copyright protection371PENANAK4HVsYgEEp 維尼
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換句話説,感覺就像變態版的《哈利波特》。8964 copyright protection371PENANAmrfDbo7sh1 維尼
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如果喜歡這種校園故事,又可以接受各種變態角色及變態劇情,那麽可以嘗試進入這所學校就讀。8964 copyright protection371PENANAsZaoicd6VY 維尼
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不過在入學之前,請問你們認識Lv99史萊姆、凝雨、卯金加刀子、笑具、柚月、願飄零、虛冲等作者嗎?8964 copyright protection371PENANAj1iD5y4yrb 維尼
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認識?8964 copyright protection371PENANALRxjHEIeRP 維尼
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很好!那你就放心入學,跟一堆變態角色們度過變態的校園生活,並滿足對變態的渴望。8964 copyright protection371PENANAfaJKWHKkoe 維尼
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不認識?8964 copyright protection371PENANAP4EhECGHFK 維尼
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那就……不如先去看看那些作者的作品?8964 copyright protection371PENANAaYCBaR1tuc 維尼
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這是因為……Happy喵讓這些作者出現在學校裏,並惡搞他們。8964 copyright protection371PENANAn9zn9TlGXf 維尼
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要是不熟悉這些作者,入學後就會覺得角色名字很奇怪,或是有些梗搞不明,甚至……會有些疏離感。8964 copyright protection371PENANAvYaVx7mDOe 維尼
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換句話說,這部作品的閲讀門檻挺高的。8964 copyright protection371PENANAGw0BaTQyQK 維尼
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能不能得到樂趣,最終視乎讀者們有多瞭解出現在作品裏的衆多作者。8964 copyright protection371PENANAVLllH5Abg9 維尼
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在此,預祝各位入學順利,成功當上變態。8964 copyright protection371PENANADDHHCI0sVu 維尼
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《變態大學 University of Perversion》作品連結:https://www.penana.com/article/10347668964 copyright protection371PENANAjGQqbK5k40 維尼
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以上就是《寫給讀者的宣傳式心得》。8964 copyright protection371PENANApd3Cq2RzPl 維尼
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説實話,我覺得這部作品有兩大優點,分別是「有趣的角色們」及「獨樹一格的變態題材」。8964 copyright protection371PENANA6g5n7B73hq 維尼
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而問題也很明顯,就是上面説過的閲讀門檻偏高,畢竟有些作者我也不認識,有時會感覺……這部作品不是寫給我看的。8964 copyright protection371PENANAV6lRmBTR2O 維尼
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要如何解決這問題?8964 copyright protection371PENANAis87FpJspY 維尼
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方法是有的,我相信作者本人也清楚知道,但卻選擇不那麽做而已。8964 copyright protection371PENANAmTFhP5EDuc 維尼
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不過看在有些人還是會好奇如何解決閲讀門檻的問題,我就寫出來好了,順便充字數。8964 copyright protection371PENANAtp9uqN0Ii9 維尼
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第一個問題,角色名都用作者的名字,例如主角名為Lv99史萊姆,會讓人覺得非常突兀。8964 copyright protection371PENANAO92odjR4jS 維尼
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如何解決?8964 copyright protection371PENANAa8fq2tnfOP 維尼
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拿回主角Lv99史萊姆作為案例,我會建議寫成正經風格的「雷貝爾.乃帝奈.史萊穆」或是亂來瘋格的「勒貝爾.奶滴奶.屎來母」。8964 copyright protection371PENANA45GA5qMYJH 維尼
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如此一來,應該能減少各種作者名字出現時的突兀感,降低閲讀門檻,方便一般讀者的同時,也能讓名字出現在作品裏的作者們開心。8964 copyright protection371PENANABCiK5FUQXe 維尼
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其實我相信Happy喵也知道這一點,只是選擇不那麽做。8964 copyright protection371PENANABEOs3n2DyV 維尼
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第二個問題,就是變態題材挺特別的,但劇情結構感覺有點鬆散。8964 copyright protection371PENANAUHcU3YDcXr 維尼
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如何解決?8964 copyright protection371PENANAgrosvQH6XK 維尼
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這個就更簡單了,認真思考一下劇情。8964 copyright protection371PENANA56xnD9dHpH 維尼
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同樣的,我相信Happy喵也知道這一點,只是選擇不那麽做。8964 copyright protection371PENANAENhoPdhKE4 維尼
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最後,在這裏挑幾個小毛病説説,讓大家一起探討好了。8964 copyright protection371PENANAvr9pzaXuoe 維尼
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首先:8964 copyright protection371PENANAYBhs881qX9 維尼
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作品是第一人稱,個人覺得不用特地强調「我的老媽」或「我的老爸」,直接老媽老爸就好,少點贅字。8964 copyright protection371PENANAdfi0g6Yb5u 維尼
其他章節也有些贅字,但就不一一細說。建議修文時,多想想某些字會不會感覺累贅了點。8964 copyright protection371PENANAo3yul2QccI 維尼
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另一個毛病,就是當同一個場面出現三或更多角色時,我有時會分不出對白是誰説的。8964 copyright protection371PENANA4H2FNY7MUO 維尼
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一開始發現這個問題,就是第十章的列車那裡。8964 copyright protection371PENANAOeElseMhpe 維尼
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這一點還請多加注意。8964 copyright protection371PENANAmzt6dnMPNZ 維尼
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個人對於這部作品感到最遺憾的,就是處處令我覺得「這部作品似乎只寫給特定人群,不是寫給我的」。8964 copyright protection371PENANApu3gIaWtOQ 維尼
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我上次寫了《大小姐今天也在煩惱戀愛的事情!》的心得後,其實還有繼續閲讀完畢並補上後續劇情的心得,但似乎很多人不知道。8964 copyright protection371PENANAwKtrcUmlPj 維尼
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在這裡向Happy喵說聲抱歉,這部作品我不會再繼續看下去了,理由就是上面寫的:「這部作品似乎只寫給特定人群,不是寫給我的」。8964 copyright protection371PENANAmYSX6SUzJg 維尼
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很可惜,我只是接觸了Happy喵愛玩鬧及變態的一面,卻無法從這部作品觸及作者的靈魂。所以,我跑去加了《我們曾經在這個世界上竭盡全力地生存下去!》的書籤,希望能探索作者變態之外的另一面。8964 copyright protection371PENANASKxJjThF1X 維尼
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這裏就送佛送到西,放下《我們曾經在這個世界上竭盡全力地生存下去!》的連結好了:https://www.penana.com/article/9273198964 copyright protection371PENANAjyt88xysMl 維尼
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想説的就是這些,願Happy喵創作愉快!8964 copyright protection371PENANAD9Bpt9lCy4 維尼
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