雖然人鬼愛情我喜歡,但整體故事有點過於沉重,我們先從簡介說起。409Please respect copyright.PENANAcmzqgv9TwB
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有明確點出作品的主題要點,這點我給好評。409Please respect copyright.PENANAFL1aGmt2fT
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不少作品在簡介處都打得跟狗屎一樣,就算內容再怎麼精彩,我也不會去看。409Please respect copyright.PENANA4SjVMnkl6d
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因為我們在書局也是先看簡介,去決定是否要購買這本書對吧?
觀看序章的時候,其實會有點過於煩悶。409Please respect copyright.PENANAqpT5w34bZa
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可能是主題有點政治敏感,是關於台灣跟中共那邊的關係。409Please respect copyright.PENANAR2LbrFVadO
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另外有一處必須給予好評的,就是對於男主角的刻畫。409Please respect copyright.PENANAxliL7I7tXu
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由於是陰陽眼,所以有時不經意的舉動會讓其他人感到匪夷所思。409Please respect copyright.PENANAhvvRjawlYn
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作者有表達出第三人對主角的看法,以及主角內心真實的想法。409Please respect copyright.PENANAr0OiSy2nQq
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這點我是覺得處理的不錯。409Please respect copyright.PENANA6eDJuYnJ8e
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由於本人特別喜歡觀察角色的刻畫,在這點我覺得有滿足到。
再來畫面感跟代入感的問題,是我覺得對於這個作品來說最嚴重的弊端。409Please respect copyright.PENANAwaG7xCYlkC
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可能是序章的關係,我個人是覺得序章很爛,說實在的。409Please respect copyright.PENANApGXjGCirYm
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序章的東西可以簡單帶過,直接切入主角跟同伴玩耍。409Please respect copyright.PENANAXT2YKiIazP
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同一時間,在陰間正有一對陌生男女正在廝殺,我覺得這種對比的衝擊感會比較強烈。
文筆整體流暢,並不會有太多奇怪的地方。409Please respect copyright.PENANAxEOsQnnNuV
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至於剛剛所說的畫面感跟代入感的問題,有覺得很多時候人物在進行對話的時候,他們沒有一些動作或是表情嗎?
雖然作者有把男女主角的對話設計的逗趣一點,但個人我覺得還差點味。409Please respect copyright.PENANAB1Ez084rzq
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最後有三點評語:
1.差評: 建議每章的字數不要那麼多,其實看得很累。409Please respect copyright.PENANAepcHDx0lIT
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2.好評: 在第二章結束時,有強烈畫面感。409Please respect copyright.PENANArwlNukQC5x
阿麒跟女主親吻過後,女主消失的那種失落,那種不捨,有明確表達出來。409Please respect copyright.PENANAX4NYHBw9eB
在來以蒲公英作為一個完美的斷點,這點值得讓這部作品整體昇華了一個層次。409Please respect copyright.PENANA1O1LXIiICw
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3.阿麒的人際關係。409Please respect copyright.PENANABPUTS8Ni4v
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小時候對於比較特殊的小孩,通常會被同儕冠上異類、怪胎等詞語。409Please respect copyright.PENANA5GfJsT1D9s
照理來說,應該要這樣的。409Please respect copyright.PENANATeCglUMqnD
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男主角的人際關係不好,在某一次的契機下遇到了女主角,並發現了女主角才是真心為了好,為她著想的人,並發展出純純的愛,最後女主消失,這樣不是會更有情緒波動嗎?409Please respect copyright.PENANAZshp8CK2ZR
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這算是我的個人寫法,其實也不算是評語,只是單純如果是我會以這樣的角度下去撰寫故事。409Please respect copyright.PENANA2DiiKrzL7B
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結尾: 409Please respect copyright.PENANAlgpTW5LXCZ
文筆不錯,但代入感差了點。409Please respect copyright.PENANAj3ScTzE3dY
劇情如果是都市愛情可能我會比較喜歡,但這也是我個人的想法。409Please respect copyright.PENANAK7FNAo6DRL
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節奏方面還算可以,由衷建議分開章節。409Please respect copyright.PENANAWjipaGtWJG
不然一章那麼多,我看得很累。409Please respect copyright.PENANAbn3TcOCpSj
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記憶點唯有跟老婆接吻後消失的部分。
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分數:˙ 70409Please respect copyright.PENANAyh5jNSNPQ1
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本來要給60而已,風兒的文筆算不差,給這分數不會不合理。409Please respect copyright.PENANAnaySd6nxMc
但至於為什麼要加十分呢,五分是在於封面有吸引力,五分在於第二章的結尾拿捏的有到位。409Please respect copyright.PENANANOog5AZ2J4
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原本想用力噴的,但這部確實不爛。409Please respect copyright.PENANAIC94kJHdFt
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算是蕉園佳作。