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大家好,今天我將爲林檎的作品《大小姐今天也在煩惱戀愛的事情!》留下心得。8964 copyright protection833PENANAHPDaUfSxwD 維尼
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首先,先説明一下我對於心得的想法。8964 copyright protection833PENANAQBtjRJodF5 維尼
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在這個寫得好並不代表一定有人氣的環境,我希望我的心得不是單純地挖掘作者可進步之處,還希望作者能夠獲得動力以完成作品,甚至……8964 copyright protection833PENANAEAjaz1JeAs 維尼
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……能夠讓我的心得,替這部作品召來更多讀者。8964 copyright protection833PENANAS1ziNtxloH 維尼
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有鑒於此,本心得將會分爲兩個部分:8964 copyright protection833PENANA7EFdRd7Dht 維尼
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事不宜遲,現在開始。8964 copyright protection833PENANArxyCYRLsAk 維尼
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1)寫給讀者的宣傳式心得8964 copyright protection833PENANA2I4ONV25mg 維尼
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首先,《大小姐今天也在煩惱戀愛的事情!》是個怎樣的故事呢?8964 copyright protection833PENANAanuAsHi9vt 維尼
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依我所閲讀的範圍,這是一個關於女主角席娜身為最強魔法天才,但在戀愛方面卻是個最弱智障,再加上戀愛觀異於常人的軍師泰莉亞,兩人一起闖出各種鬧劇的故事。8964 copyright protection833PENANApQDmcedXna 維尼
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説得直白點,就是一堆聽不懂人話的角色們聚在一起,演出一套嚴肅搞笑的戀愛喜劇。8964 copyright protection833PENANAlSct2Td5uf 維尼
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這部作品每章字數約2000左右,劇情推展穩妥,對白設計也不會囉嗦,文筆也讓人讀得舒服。8964 copyright protection833PENANAoakS8HyuFI 維尼
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如果你是在能夠集中精神的狀態,例如正在悠閑地喝著下午茶,想要找本書閲讀,那麽我非常推薦這部作品。8964 copyright protection833PENANAuT6GCaWwr8 維尼
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但如若你只有短短幾分鐘的零碎時間,那就不太適合了。8964 copyright protection833PENANA9E9jEvCZPk 維尼
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畢竟閱讀這部作品需要一些沉浸度,才能品味出角色之間的有趣對白。8964 copyright protection833PENANAxkvQoKUq2t 維尼
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特別是當角色A在挖苦角色B時,作者不會明顯説出誰在挖苦誰,而是讓角色們利用對白演出來。8964 copyright protection833PENANAJDIIfzxp4j 維尼
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在這裏,我也對作品的前五章節(1-1至1-5)給與高度評價。8964 copyright protection833PENANAFP1CozJT0E 維尼
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這並非我自己信口胡説,數據也證明這一點:8964 copyright protection833PENANAVDpZxX8zGF 維尼
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直到1-5章節,仍留住約四分之一的讀者,而喜歡數更是幾乎維持不變。8964 copyright protection833PENANA1OAdk1FuQu 維尼
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是以不只推薦給讀者,我也在此推薦給苦於如何寫好小說開頭的作者們。8964 copyright protection833PENANARnIyEWkvj5 維尼
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以上就是我的宣傳式心得,接下來將進入面向作者的分享式心得。8964 copyright protection833PENANAydUO3VwIvX 維尼
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2)寫給作者的分享式心得8964 copyright protection833PENANA85qZOdjk9R 維尼
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其實……説是寫給作者,但也是寫給現有讀者的心得。8964 copyright protection833PENANAYbpu2sum7L 維尼
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由於閲讀範圍只有前兩萬字左右,我只能寫出一般作者都想知道的讀者想法。8964 copyright protection833PENANATLrKvB0aRU 維尼
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這方面的切入點有好幾個,但關於劇情、文筆、節奏之類的,上面已經敘述,就不再重複。8964 copyright protection833PENANAUtuFv1SldV 維尼
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唯一能夠擴展切入的,就是角色方面。8964 copyright protection833PENANARTDxW1emjB 維尼
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首先,來説説女角色。8964 copyright protection833PENANAeRAMGW9V53 維尼
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女主席娜,魔法天才但戀愛白癡,這種反差萌是挺可愛的,令人期待未來的表現。8964 copyright protection833PENANAfWRKbnyzjd 維尼
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接下來是泰莉亞,也是我最喜歡的女角色。活了三百年的龍女,那種成熟御姐的魅力,實在令人無法擋。8964 copyright protection833PENANAhqm7Q1Nsk9 維尼
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同時我也很喜歡她異於常人的戀愛觀,若沒有她那些餿主意,這部作品的魅力肯定少了一半。8964 copyright protection833PENANAzxdmW5X0Yi 維尼
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然後登場的還有艾麗絲,説真的登場時,我只記得那張燦爛笑容的插圖,之後她在圖書館與人偶「黑」的相遇,才開始覺得有趣。8964 copyright protection833PENANAB8nd9Fy4wL 維尼
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再來説説男角色。8964 copyright protection833PENANABVjbnOrKIc 維尼
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男角方面,我個人最喜歡的就是人偶,名字應該叫做「黑」吧?8964 copyright protection833PENANAmYfoZXYtr4 維尼
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這位角色的性格可謂非常鮮明,才剛出場就吸引了我,似乎之後會鬧出大事,非常期待。8964 copyright protection833PENANASbT8pjqNVX 維尼
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相比起最喜歡,最不喜歡的就是庫雷因了,畢竟實力又强大又受女生歡迎,就像龍傲天或言情小説裏的男主那樣……8964 copyright protection833PENANAu2gQQoBDjA 維尼
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當然,這只是我個人的看法,不必太在意。8964 copyright protection833PENANAKHk0hhYgDf 維尼
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如果很在意,我建議可以在庫雷因身上加個令人印象深刻的弱點。害怕女人這個弱點不行,就像很有錢的人在喊窮,只會令我個人更不喜歡……8964 copyright protection833PENANAwmoCsttNHu 維尼
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還有女主暗戀的對象拉提,暫時沒什麽深刻印象,期待以後的表現?8964 copyright protection833PENANAxWfFXDfKBq 維尼
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前面説過,我給予前五章高度評價,那是因爲……問題出在1-6章節 守夜人小隊的新隊員。8964 copyright protection833PENANAE4nth4hKzo 維尼
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話說目前的主流寫法,就是設定必須透過故事呈現出來。8964 copyright protection833PENANAyfelkAuwGV 維尼
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而很明顯,1-6章節就是通過新人隊員入隊的劇情,介紹故事設定。問題就在於……可以感覺到作者的刻意,一看就知道是要介紹故事設定。8964 copyright protection833PENANAdkoxyC8fOq 維尼
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好,還可以更好。下次可以思考看看,如何不露痕跡地通過劇情,自然地讓讀者明瞭故事的各種設定。8964 copyright protection833PENANAaMjZBrQDCa 維尼
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遺憾的是……閱讀完1-6章節,我唯一記得的就是艾莉絲的笑容,也就是那張插圖。8964 copyright protection833PENANA1ICejHrwGJ 維尼
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平時閲讀小説,我們就是在聽作者説故事,但在1-6章節,我們卻是在聽作者說故事裏的尤裏烏斯説故事。8964 copyright protection833PENANAT22l9hfjSZ 維尼
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換句話説,我們平時只需要想像作者的故事。但如今,卻變成我們在想像作者故事裏的尤裏烏斯時,還要再想像尤裏烏斯所説的故事,想像中的想像……實在難倒我了。8964 copyright protection833PENANA76Vss1YfgH 維尼
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如果前五章我給四到五星的評價,那麽1-6章節在對比之下,就只能給個二星了。8964 copyright protection833PENANAhpHqMfgjp3 維尼
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當然,如今這個時代,提出問題卻不提出解決方案,是會被人討厭或被解決的。8964 copyright protection833PENANAZMI83WekkQ 維尼
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在不改動劇情的前提下,建議可以利用魔法或道具之類的,像虛擬現實般讓艾莉絲親身經歷尤裏烏斯所説的情景。如此一來,我們也能通過艾麗絲的視野,更加清楚瞭解故事設定之類。8964 copyright protection833PENANAOwRShxn13G 維尼
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想説的就這些,《大小姐今天也在煩惱戀愛的事情!》是一部非常有趣的作品!作者圖文雙修辛苦了,請繼續加油!8964 copyright protection833PENANA0Oak9ZPYVz 維尼
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