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雜事錄
ISSUE #6
Author: tHe狗
雜事錄
Author: tHe狗
ISSUE #6
【小說】無盡債務_奇幻、冒險
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　Ptt 有人寫簡介了就不多贅述故事概梗，可以點進去看，偏瘦。簡單來講我自己覺得行文描述，那些用眼睛看到的事物描述都沒那麼直覺，需要想一下，這種頓感其實還滿瑣碎的，對於閱讀感來說不是這麼好。以我自己看過的小說最相近的例子是天啟預報的風月，不過風月算是處理相對好的。90Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡuNwU1rT2Rf

　會造成這種狀況其實就，習慣性的形容詞或者名詞的橫移借用是問題之一，一個句子的行文、陳述順序選擇也是其一。

 　然後再來就是前面劇情編排有點亂吧，資訊冒出來太多不過都用比較自然的方式解決了。現在看起來是倒吃甘蔗。設定還滿新穎，總體來看還挺不錯的。

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雜事錄
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Last updated: Nov 15, 2023
Total word count: 3,660
Total reading time: 12 Minutes
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