【魚魚創挑第三期】在冬季，談場文字戀愛吧 - 結語

大家早安，歷經了數月的作品賞析與語評，終於在今天完成了總結。

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（呼、呼...這根本是大工程，一個人要消化真的不容易阿。）

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對了，每一篇文章都是你們的用心之作。

魚魚，都認真的給予了短評，如有錯評之處，請多家見諒！！

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下面，針對本次的第三期的創作挑戰，區分為兩大類獎項，合計２６個獎賞，情況分述如下：

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小說類864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡtAliCh8MxY

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蕗舟Lunoe864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡBxu09KW1un
#152 憂鬱的櫥窗模特兒864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡtfL5ruLbdo

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擬物為人，卻不料真的是人，可把我驚呆了。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡZvQ78IuxCg
文末的轉變，十分有勁，卻有一種鶴立雞群的創新感。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡsDLQuPS22b
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冬季，自古便是憂鬱的季節，即便在世界某一處的角落，我們也沒法躲避那世間的萬有定律。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡyrPTFDV26j
而蕗舟大藉由假人模特兒的引頸期盼，來襯托出等待著一整個冬季未到時的良人皈依。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ5NUI6oLWcz
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終究，那個男人還是回來了。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ8F7HRee59W
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銀色喜悅，銀色象徵著高貴、永恆，卻如同我們每個人心中，不可取代的純潔，想展現出的特質。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡlGeq4IX9bT
然而，眾多人群來來往往，卻無一人可識破真人的所扮演，而如同世俗，人們往往只看表面，卻無法深入思索真實的涵義。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡASYpujoaPT
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但願，此刻的我，也能尋覓到內心真正的期望。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡBiW1Y6clxJ

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在字數完美落在千字之下，故事新穎並且傳達出角色的心思，在183部作品中，是幾部少數能透過故事的本身去探討另外一層含意的作品。

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Historia864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡG3EkTuHySG

#34 我給獵物的祕密情書864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡb77Fb5uQ2a

#38 聽話忠犬的懊悔日記864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡAvkTzajpiT

#42 新聞媒體的社會報導864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡb6KTvJ2OVB

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【初評】864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡLNN1u2n5K8

來回讀過了幾遍，我嘗試想過了兩種劇本：864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡa7eqrQYNXi
（一）兩人原是相戀多年的戀人，但因求學從而相隔遠距離的兩地，因為女生周遭多出了新的異性朋友，兩人的熱度進而變的冷卻黯淡，也許，愛意早已蕩然無存。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡLNlBXmbAuW
因為一絲的醋意，接續而來的紙條事件，把兩人僅存的那點信任完全的打破了，即便是今年聖誕節還見上一面，我更覺得完全不需要了。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡpssF1hsJBC
多的都只有無盡的沉默與尷尬，見不如不見、此時無聲勝過有聲。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡXdP2Wdh1Uu
另外，針對紙條事件，也許還有著第三個男生從中作祟，更是個心機的布局，從而回到了現實面，這個人一次解決了兩個對手（？），才稱的是上本劇最大的贏家。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡieoxQoJQN6
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（二）作為獵物，或許，這個人根本與采筑沒那種熟識的關係，而是個單戀的愛慕者。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡoslGU8TzGV
第一段，作為從旁觀察的男人，他對於郭睿傑的醋意如同此生大敵，而「我很愛你」已到了病態般的自喃。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡxyrMK6JLQZ
第二段，也許身為同班上的某位同學，一個日常的玩笑「與異性朋友」保持距離，不會進一步的發展，卻讓他耿耿於懷，早已埋下了這枚炸彈的引線，直至紙條事件的出現。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡyAY1bmtg3R
第三段，就是他把這些東西透過某些手段，送至到了郭睿傑的父母手上，進而處理了眼神的對手。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡkUpGT28hir
末段，以狩獵者的視角，對這個獵物發出了宣言，「聖誕節的這一天」我必獵妳來收尾。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡc6AvQDEa5c
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興許，只是我的過度解讀，但對於采筑來說，都難以用上好心情來面對這個寒冬了。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡK0Kw8VdSgs

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采筑的懵懂建構在她內心的小小世界，卻在給了翰以後，一切都生變了。不僅僅只是貪婪，更多的是威脅。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡLRmM2HGobd
原來愛，已成了單純的肉體關係，但更多的卻如母狗般的忠於主人，直至主子失去了興致。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡNpHlOE2wyH
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而最後一個自己能傾訴的睿傑也離去，這對於采筑來說要是多麼的徬徨。同時間，反客為主，第一章節的男主，從一位溫柔善良的他，轉變為如人狼般的教師。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡk2m8g0ELLc
帶入了故事另外一波高潮。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡOdVKiELkaK

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善惡到頭終有報，隨著時間的推移，惡行將被繩之以法。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡT8MNlGONuA
或許，出頭的那人將被社會與世人討伐，卻能拯救更多人於水火之中。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡYmq9esRUB4
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一文當中正如，最近社會頭條「職場性騷擾」的案子層出不窮，而誰又真的敢面對社會不公?864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡfx2IchVCYp
怕失去了飯碗?864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡYBOyDFN7s3
怕丟失了顏面?864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡi99g7Fa6kX
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以女子的自表，更多地闡述出是這些年來受盡的委屈，與下定決心切斷扭曲的愛。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡlTCRtz7lPd
小女孩終究會長大，蝴蝶與百合終究會死去和凋零，如兒時情景漸行漸遠。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡGI48F3WkgL
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文末，我見識到了是勇敢更甚於愛戀，而即便軀體早已殘破，但心魔的糾結卻在這一刻化作了灰燼。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡvlRJn54Pj5
如隱喻的冬，隨之拂袖揮去。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡIRZMDnCoSL

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【複評】864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡM24K8kJhG5

Historia三部曲的複雜度在183部作品中，絕對能稱得上是矛列前茅，在透過采筑與翰的視角，引領出教師扭曲的人性，與讓大眾無法接受的事實。

用字上簡明扼要，故事完整，而分至三篇幅寫作，在用字上超過千字，故此將其評比為第二名。

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#165《外套》864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡBBigegls6X

AnTeD864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡWvsQyCSWTw

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跟隨著的故事開頭，都快被故事主角的他，那絲絲片點細膩的舉止，差點沒要做死自己的衝動了。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡPlf8wVRLz6
然而，作為首次約會的她更是思慮成熟不已，僅只作為冰凍發寒的手掌都尚可觀察入微，如此相伴，可謂夫復何求？864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡsR4Jux9XXn
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男女在戀愛中所在意的角度本就不同，而在AnTeD大的作品中，更可感受到景色間的優美、兩人間美好的細膩互動，皆可輕易波動了正在欣賞這篇文章的我們，是如此暖和，是否這件外套遞給的已非男主，而是我們呢？864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ1bebmHRjYa
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後續，兩人是否走下去不得而知，但可以知道的是，男生的心中此生怕是再難以忘懷這場約會了。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ6X99k9DXc7

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本篇作品用字流暢，然帶入卻是極強，讓人如同身歷其境，故事在183部中屬冬季中的愛戀系列，而應景於本創挑的冬季戀愛精神，故此將推至第三名。

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落花864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡbEAabcByf5

#84 冬梅864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡJ94IWO4dx6

#135窒愛

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【初評】864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡO7E6OexOwB

「落花大的深情碰碰車，總能無情地不斷往前駛來，即便在侷限於千字的顛簸路上，也能如履平地。」寂魚此刻正在螢幕前，思索著該如何評判，這一回合的短評，但，最主要還是因為我自己也想上車車。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡXGsbtN2w7I

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或許是女子早已離世遠去，抑或是，女子熱情不再，追求新刺激，拋下了顏禾而去，但我更願為是後者，至少還有今世再見的機會。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡBvAXJQQnt1
剪不斷，理還不斷地來亂；知己已是難得可見，尤以是在床上這方面，簡直如稀世珍寶，顏禾或許這輩子都將會背負著，這一無法忘懷的情感走向墳墓，如他那抹除不掉的手腕刺青，這是全文中最令人難以忘懷的兩人情感互動。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ2ltcaPIj5m
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而在用詞方面，魚魚莫過於深愛著「冬梅」點點開、點點落，唯美同時具備浪漫氣息，雖是敘述著依人離去的悲落心情，卻又能反覆再次咀嚼前文的激情畫面，主題仍又帶回了令人印象深刻的情密繾綣之中。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡmDJJLAs1BI
寒冬似乎還未走完，而葉去早已落得冷清枯寂，這樣悲愁的深情，只能在記憶中朦朧找尋回來了，想必即便未來再有身軀契合的對象，也不見得能在情感上填補這個空洞。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡGJxFkgLZNb

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僅只希望，春季晨曦，可以多帶有些這片愁的滋味。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡiVq1aQqiAO

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與#84冬梅那篇比對，這期間度過了人生好幾個階段，也同時經歷了這個創作挑戰上百篇的短評，希望這次的評論能更加客觀。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡlLzpQAePBb
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與前篇比對，#135窒愛著重在敘述對於兩人"鬥牛"方面的對手戲，尤以巴著籃球不斷進出籃框粗暴與挑逗對手的話語，更是讓人意猶未盡，想多看幾次秦白楓上籃的那種慾望。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ2JEerVL3zz
在形容黃宣麓方面，雖有「他」這個字眼帶給我閱讀時的幾分困惑，但在言情方面涉獵多年的讀者，絕對不會在意這一點點的小瑕疵，反倒如果沒有在尾段所出現的「後框」一詞，我都覺得「他」與「她」的疑問。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡXaRDBDFjSV
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...等等。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡuBbeonAd07
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...難道，真的是「他」。冷汗再度直流，電流直擊我內心最後的那道防線，我被破防了，是我那僅存的矜持。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡXOIXOgok1U
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鬥牛的賽事，在短篇後段，在一場次隱約又悄悄地敲響了起來，只是眾多讀者肯定想一窺究竟絕不止步於此。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡVsPZxWNlCj
下筆於此，魚魚完全認定這篇球賽不僅有「實用」這番解析，更是有著用詞優美的美譽，至於兩人是否僅是短暫的球場上過客，我們早就不在乎了。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡeIwwgzE5iV
畢竟，讀者早就享受完了這篇萬用好文。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡMbJf2ZyRPZ
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期待，還能再見其他選手上場的好球賽。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡRHNTjpJqi2

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余軍864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡXOIngBCdFr

#88 十四歲的殘酷青春物語：核冬天

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這些在地下生存的後代人們，早已走不出這片地球末日的殘存之地，而這卻也是物種的悲歌。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡyQYZriGLMq
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即便孩童真能跨出百里外搜尋到生物與傳說的綠洲又當如何?864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡbTvsVyXkti
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地底人民，或許早已不敢再走出溫室，也或許科技再也舉步維艱的地步了。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡqRK6fWoUUs
即便突破了，又到了陰謀論的展開，暗中祕密破壞成功突破的人與機器也說不定。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡZ3dPuzR13P
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然而這一切，殊不知都是人們自己所造成的結果。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡw58mRXSvId

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吟遊C人864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡWBJnsuAjdC
171-應該埋藏在雪地裡的珍貴的遺憾864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡQv0ijTwA6s

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【初評】864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡjyEDS6Gcr8

以奇幻鋪敘來說，Ｃ大的伏筆非常順暢，讀起來像泡在溫泉暖和身子，享受冬季反差的那絲溫和感受。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡVH5UaBbmZj
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以極光前後呼應點題，「極光」是故事的羈絆，因其而再續前緣，也在最後一刻畫下句話。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡgwF9KaYPO6
法特，是傭兵隊長也同為年少時期的異性好友，此刻，更多的是彼此間相互緬懷的歲月靜好。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ92Njg6yyBh
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡDSyjrk0XcT
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ1r0g6kalId
不論是否在劍與魔法的世界，抑或是，現實生活中，再臨自己的初戀那是個想將對方的手給牽繫起來的心思，是如此的妄想。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡwXWVgKHnvW
法特，或許能憑藉自身異能，把整個小隊都滅了也說不然，如今自追隨拜月女神後，早已身不由己。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡNTzek1VdTo
緣分再次出現，或許，只要他的一句「與我共度下半輩子吧？」說不定，兩人可背負上世界的罵名，卻可擁有法特自己的理想生活。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡGQvqeurU0P
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡGY4N2jb1eK
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡtqvetekILx
可當光逐漸畫下了無際的星空，他卻不自覺沒有察覺出，希梅娜的眼角邊也同為畫下一記淺稀的淚痕。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡZDcc88LsG6

864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡDFNUaNOXJ3

【NO.7】

無元人864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡPUDIrso9ST

#112-失去一切的冬日864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡICcr1pIFDD

864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡc8o9RXLdfY

【初評】864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡUuRZ2nhNtN

方隸臣在告白失敗了以後，以那極盡自虐形式追尋自愛的表現。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡdmkkpdY76B
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡGSL6pkQulf
以魚死網破，同歸於盡把自己此生所愛保留了下來，在旁人眼底，或許，人性早已扭曲抹滅，已然沒有了救治的希望。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡTgg3uoYcYG
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡBcAypaC5lM
而另一方面，卻向自己所愛表達，自己一生鍾愛獨一人的覺悟。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡTKUg5hD4at
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ6kzUr1RsZp
可嘆。人世間，卻多數時候都要以悲劇收場。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡTVF5sNY3JY
我們的初戀，又有幾人是美好甜蜜的呢?864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡpkR4Z3ptY4
這個平安夜，白雪緩緩飄落在兩具血泊軀殼上。而這終究算是得到了一切，還是算失去了一切呢?864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡoVjgiQMUTs

864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ24kS9RWyuf

【NO.8】864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ3nlmeIriGd

胤宸864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ6fBtus93AJ

#69 藍鬍子的暖冬864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡSTL4ikpP9P

864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡJnt1BGgLmw

【初評】864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡdhEq2uW0YP

輪迴幾世也僅只在意著妳，而像這冥冥之中早已注定的事，又會有誰能猜測的到呢。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡT6bwhVqmCu
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡAehrjy8XCZ
從優美的場色敘寫到純情、激情、疑惑、恐懼等等，直到故事後段的轉折都帶著令觀眾想打開這潘朵拉盒子的衝動。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡlrrSP0Izzp
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ5KLMFiMu1s
開篇我卻從未能料想到這竟是帶有點令人顫抖害怕的恐怖愛情小說，確實有些被驚嚇到，可再回頭反覆雋永，卻發現藍景墨早已埋下伏筆，《格林童話》裡的《藍鬍子》篇章，便是如同那潘朵拉，經不起誘惑的將不開屬於自己知道的秘密給探索，終究會走入命運的分歧。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡx9hRUs7iRU
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡJaiBShonZP
但現實而論，又能有多少人能經得起這般誘惑呢？864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡGK0yWn3x8q

864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ2svAfl61p3

【NO.9】

笑具

#104 男人也期待著白馬公主864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡo6tEUhRYO2

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【初評】864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ3prF8IRpqC

失而復得，再去失去的萬惡循環，是天道不測，造化弄人。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡfyB9cgk368
唯有莉莉知道，只是莉莉無奈無人知曉。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡf3vCzdJWw7
如果說此事發生在我們自身，那我們會選擇結束這段旅程，割捨痛苦循環嗎？864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡXUWgMOJAoM
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡPseFRdYsAk
因為知道了憶草的喜好、因為知道了憶草的狀況、因為知道了他所知道的問題。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡSrExM015G2
所以便選擇了留下。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡuBo6ne7EaA
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡW0xCRfkQgr
我們從文字中看出了笑具大的細膩之處，想藉由不斷挑戰著重複的一道困難，卻也勇敢直往的衝勁。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ6HxHInGwRm
好比如，此刻的莉莉，深嘆一起，闔眼睜眼對著一臉疑惑的他，再次開口說道：「你好！我喜歡你，請務必和我交往！」864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡrwkzEyfrhu
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ2cw2iz1ICM
反覆讀取文章，字句雋永，可以說是容易敲醒內心那一塊柔軟的心田。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡd1J5HmvRfP

864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡpitq0xxQLk

【NO.10】864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡQM0WW8v6Up

逆流而上864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡMbz7kO8iYr

#132 #143 #160〈逃出香港外番I穿花蝴蝶〉上、中、下篇

864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡdPqJNKRltW

【初評】864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡLQ4rynUBRg

優美的景色敘述，讓我閱讀間偶然沈醉在故事的情境裡。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡWLLEEOBNN1
走在與原先不符期待的曼徹斯特街道，片段的字句中我聞出區穎的一絲無奈感。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡycU5nhu8ub

864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡhcWz3IZ7UC
尾段，突然出現的黑夏克，會讓我想去了解那是什麼生物？864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡPg26jyh33I

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歌曲聲再次響起。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡv9hIYTX1mD
原來黑夏克，竟是隻惡靈（？），看到這地方轉折處還有那名夾藏著刀的渣男，意外地似乎有點熱血。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡs7Au5bLHzE
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡxKcNZX9BBf
故事後，寫道了穿花蝴蝶的伏筆，為故事延伸下一篇的精彩開端。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡPxbN6jTHzR

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竟還有技能的設定嗎？864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ6eCPtudzib
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡZfbew57OC6
其實透過片段，我能明顯感受到這部作品用詞非常優美，故事敘述也到位，雖然節錄中段的地方，我仍舊銜接不太起來，而我卻可在女孩飛去香港的同時，剎那明白了逃出香港的意思。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡn4NYNzPTzy

864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡKvTCM382Lf

【佳作1】864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡABZjmPbZtP

十三郎864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡzNk1O6SAcd

#02 我們再談一次戀愛吧864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡthO12HMAcf

864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ5gKEaPUjMW

【佳作2】864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡqWiFoed5qR

mi-na-mi864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡqLMoXU4rjT

#40 蒙特利爾的冬季 864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡGggjKixctV

864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ0mdLpGOWcV

【佳作3】864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡep4bguu07A

清夢864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ2W2Dt0EzYP

#66 寒冬中的睡前故事 864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡHqPOOi8nGo

864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡr86AvcdhDO

【佳作4】864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡEi4gqk3oUk

KLC864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ0gHJWdAX4I

#118 冬與櫻864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ9rbXpzx3nO

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【佳作5】864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡUTmJkU7Aum

沙發王的故事864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ4aLs3rfqP8

#10 冬天過後864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡssvCS97J5b

864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ4e7xOBFdjm

【佳作6】864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡm8wrXoTmyq

伍拾陸864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡDJ3Sqq9hi2

#105 你這麼喜歡愛撒嬌的貓咪，會不會也喜歡愛撒嬌的我？

864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡXDYJa7yNQy

864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡKyGBSnVdTB

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864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡDLPF9heVlC

新詩類

【NO.1】864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡKcKOzEVDsa

c.j.Vic864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡNI3ZwrgMd0

#124 一池冬864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡJlxY4Z2Moz

【初評】864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡnK1pweCuW3

以冬劃作池，是如此絢麗的譬喻。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡYtm0tnRMsE
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡEIuvpAxU1c
前三段，以池喻風雪泛起了一絲漣漪，卻怎麼樣也無法停止早已轉動的盪樣心頭。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡFypyCmT5Xv
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡpzBgOqO8H7
而雪融之際，卻道盡了落幕情懷，而以那春有百花秋有月、夏有涼風冬有雪，若無閒事掛記心頭，那可如此令人感懷的好時節。只可惜，被攪動了一池中的深水，卻怎麼樣都無法平復了滿溢而出的傷痕；而大夢初醒誰又能先察覺出愛已不在？864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ893JqsZLXr
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡVXVwLmiCID
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡfQ5qZMPaGn
此刻，春暖緣盡。一心只想著再與你心頭探戈，誦著一首名為回憶的圓舞曲。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡuE4sa7Di1w
低頭，卻發覺，怎麼忘記了那步伐。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡBxTDtcIxob

864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡRZLrREUwHY

【NO.2】864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡFq9QIF33I2

九方思想貓864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡIpFfWvuBJm

#71 冬季幽禁864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡMasEzOZsFC

【初評】864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ3EVBiXqRle

或許，他將以禁錮了自己的情感作為戀愛的曲目。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡnroMj0hPf3
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡu3fjWHygkF
孤獨的苦痛泛起了這片幽恨漣漪，而他似乎迷失了過往自己生活過的歲月。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ0mWv9I3MfN
透過仍獨留在居室裡，她曾經使用過的物品，穿過的衣物，重複地撥放了兩人曾經誓言的跑馬燈。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡoa2mMH82T4
此刻的他，打算將自己埋進了冬季的雪地裡不再走下去，而以此冬眠。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡddUoeNox1Y
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡtyp9y5EBwP
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡyn3AKg6SYy
「春季再叫我吧。」內心有道聲響悄悄地響起，可他卻已然不在意了。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡxcLnmgmYMx
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡXysPeb30xF
靜瑟的金風，冷冽刺骨的要他品償 / 品嘗何為感情。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡGpxqfn5MIR

864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡq3gGDMsczc

【NO.3】864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡvUTTry4jHb

虛冲864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡPlvwuRrBLT

#154 笑面864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡtrlZ7fHP0X

【初評】864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡnPJfb87KAs

馬特峰的巍峨確實壯闊的令人為之讚嘆，猶如一高冷難近的美艷女子，即便座落於狹長的阿爾卑斯山一隅，世人也能輕易的尋覓中「她」來，正是獨特的皚皚白華飄著雪的盈盈地笑靨。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ5dbGpuHs1Y
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡTUI9pEsuJG
在那寒風刺骨的日子裏，深嘆口氣。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡNzpqg6j47g
豈料腦中揮之不去的都仍是妳的畫面。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡoyl8x5WnBx
只是日日夜夜，歲月過去，走盡千萬里。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡt0EJinVrci
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡYZwW65lbzv
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡeYnaYqcwbx
百忙之中，即便偶然一瞥妳過往相印片，才知道我倆已與過去的純真走的漸行漸遠。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡfrE4m6A3uG
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ90nYRufYhh
再次回頭品嘗著沖虛的詩，此刻，我迷醉於這完美排列的字句組合與尾聲奇妙安排，竟可如此這般美的堪比句中那笑顏。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡznmT2ZUwBa
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ7tf2ndlExP
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡjZUyWlC8yT
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡSDXwiKh7qb
「青春，總是留下著那明媚的憂傷。」864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡsAs2uuw9qm

864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡTBQLhSm12V

【NO.4】864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡXzC7yyy6Lb

mi-na-mi864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡsmFIEupeJJ

#100 威靈頓的夏季864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡathSbGxt4w

【初評】864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡYT0ct0fMJk

第一段詩句藉由回踏技巧，點燃了冬季惆悵的孤獨、夏季孤單的映襯。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡiSOXWhGboJ
與妳相隔萬里的距離不是距離僅有內心，是你與我的依伴。最初的內分愛意－－－至今猶愛。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡdE9EfVmqt0
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡuOEDylRDR1
尾段後勁的病痛將醞釀了多日連月來的孤寂全然爆發開來的思念藉由這日傍晚裊裊的一某夕印抹去在從威靈頓跨海千里外的太平洋西岸邊上。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡPDGyVjD957

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【NO.5】864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡzLyiPZVSNf

胤宸864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ86goqSWeQA

#50 不言冬

【初評】864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡNG7i2wsjXn

六出飛雪如精靈般飄逸著這片冬季的華麗，好似星光點綴美不勝收。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡTReUXtfM5A
864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡSMEv7FLKeg
以景物寓情，用凋零枯葉來佈置出另一襯托的梅香肆意，卻為冬之饗宴，好比如沐浴在詩人自賞玩味的冷風中。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡo40CetMrmL
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以七言絕句形式上表達出冬季的感覺，用描述景物的田園詩詞來呈現出冬季。864Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡvnl14i78fC
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