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夢凝騎士團
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確切體會到作者整個暑假投入之熱情
人物設計不錯
尤其莉莉婭 重武女僕說是王道也不過為
港式「貼地」則賦其另一種親切感
作者的努力在分鏡中亦可見一班
雖然部份受畫功所限
但不少戰鬥場面仍能表現出張力 如第8頁的俯身向前
以初作來說是相當不錯
唯改進建議有二
- 減少部份背景比重 以免畫面失焦
- 減少戰鬥場面的對話 留空間讀者自行補完