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求閱後感
ENTRY #1
Author: 小豬瑩瑩
Published:
Apr 27, 2022
求閱後感
Published:
Apr 27, 2022
ENTRY #1
不要見怪，初步看完，嘗試給評論。
Author: 小豬瑩瑩
Published:
Apr 27, 2022
1 Min Read
178 Words
No Plagiarism!PN4y14A1ctDQoBAKSBUrposted on PＥNAＮＡ

首先我覺得應要改回書名。

其實情濃咖啡室直接當是書名比較好。

另外我覺得文是流暢，但是沒記憶點。

人物有很多，但是卻很多時記不住，人物未夠鮮明。228Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡkuIvJ1D79a

嘗試寫出我的遭遇，但是主線仍然不明確。

經歷巨變，有人幫助…但之後，愛情故事，還是其他…

這好像突出不到。

我覺得你先設定一條感情線，再去寫會更好，符合情濃咖啡室這題目。

希望不要見怪，這只是初次看完的評論。

文仍然是流暢的，文筆很好，只是情節不夠明快。

再次說句，希望不要見怪。

172.69.7.95

ns 172.69.7.95da2
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