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你們會如何面對失敗？
ENTRY #7
Author: 宅米蟲子
Published:
Jun 4, 2024
你們會如何面對失敗？
Published:
Jun 4, 2024
ENTRY #7
微心得
Author: 宅米蟲子
Published:
Jun 4, 2024
1 Min Read
270 Words
No Plagiarism!czfwTcVjBSPFgx0pNTzvposted on PＥNAＮＡ

　　範圍到#7

81Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡurrM7atEWU

　　開頭利用記憶缺損勾起讀者的好奇心，埋了一些小伏筆，又提供一點小線索，例如照片中的孩子臉部被麥克筆塗掉和夢境最後孩子的臉模糊不清相對應，還有報紙上的兇殺案，一點點地將訊息釋放出來，然後一通知道前後因果的來電吊著觀眾胃口，讓人想繼續往下看。

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　　人物內心描寫的很好，能明確感受到角色焦慮抑鬱的心境。情緒循序漸進地堆疊很飽滿，順暢自然的轉換不突兀。

81Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡfwlfL8UrkW

　　用詞不會過於華麗，文筆平易近人白話好懂，不過有些句子可以再潤一下，還有一些錯字。

81Please respect copyright.ＰＥＮＡＮＡ2h6FCiLJGs

　　奇數看得出來是盧卡斯視角，偶數好像沒有固定，變得有些混亂，簡介說了是單元化，不過對我這個腦子不太行的人來說很有切割感，因為比較沒有連貫性會讓我只想跳著看奇數篇。

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