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求評——《Ed的箱庭之旅》
諸葛村夫
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我應該這幾天就會更新完開頭的章節。因此我想知道目前的開頭對於大家的觀感,有幾件事是想大家特別留意的:
1.首先就是結構上的問題,我很不擅長這部分。我感覺自己每次寫文到了某個時候文章看上去也是「有些不對勁」的感覺,卻無法說出問題所在。我估計這似乎和我寫文時候的基本功有些關係?
2.角色,這部分我打算更新了之後兩三章就會嘗試開始修改。我想知道會不會因為角色個性或者語調不夠鮮明這樣,導致「不知道說話的人是誰」的情況?
3.還有就是其他能夠留意到雜七雜八的問題?
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1.首先就是結構上的問題,我很不擅長這部分。我感覺自己每次寫文到了某個時候文章看上去也是「有些不對勁」的感覺,卻無法說出問題所在。我估計這似乎和我寫文時候的基本功有些關係?
2.角色,這部分我打算更新了之後兩三章就會嘗試開始修改。我想知道會不會因為角色個性或者語調不夠鮮明這樣,導致「不知道說話的人是誰」的情況?
3.還有就是其他能夠留意到雜七雜八的問題?
penana.com/article/1212129