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【書評】艾婭的悲劇
QRS
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作品名稱:艾婭的悲劇
作者:車車龜
類型:愛情
作品連結: https://m.penana.com/story.php?id=93410&from=searchpage
評論範圍:前五章
看了前面五章,女主上輩子真的好慘喔,期待能她未來會有好的生活吧,小艾婭和小戴爾的相處好可愛🥰,想到之後艾婭要跟別的男人有床戲,我就有點不敢看啊😱
然後一個小建議,感覺女主重生的時候情緒好像太平淡了,前世已經被強暴到麻木、絕望的人,好不容易解脫了一切卻要重來一次,她的情緒好像太過平靜了。
我從故事中感受不太到女主是一個千瘡百孔的人,好像身體重生之後,艾婭的心也跟著重生了,前世悲慘的人生沒給她留下什麼創傷(比如面對成年男性下意識恐懼之類的)。
面對叔父的時候恨意好像不夠明顯,雖然說要報仇,但是看不出女主內心不管是憤恨或是恐懼的情緒。
總之就是針對女主內心的刻畫再深刻一點會更好。
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魚落井
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你好辛勤喔
2 years ago
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QRS
@魚落井, 這是之前寫的,想放上來賺點錢錢🤩
2 years ago
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魚落井
@QRS, (◍•ᴗ•◍)❤
2 years ago
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作者:車車龜
類型:愛情
作品連結: https://m.penana.com/story.php?id=93410&from=searchpage
評論範圍:前五章
看了前面五章,女主上輩子真的好慘喔,期待能她未來會有好的生活吧,小艾婭和小戴爾的相處好可愛🥰,想到之後艾婭要跟別的男人有床戲,我就有點不敢看啊😱
然後一個小建議,感覺女主重生的時候情緒好像太平淡了,前世已經被強暴到麻木、絕望的人,好不容易解脫了一切卻要重來一次,她的情緒好像太過平靜了。
我從故事中感受不太到女主是一個千瘡百孔的人,好像身體重生之後,艾婭的心也跟著重生了,前世悲慘的人生沒給她留下什麼創傷(比如面對成年男性下意識恐懼之類的)。
面對叔父的時候恨意好像不夠明顯,雖然說要報仇,但是看不出女主內心不管是憤恨或是恐懼的情緒。
總之就是針對女主內心的刻畫再深刻一點會更好。