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我是15歲新手
雨
#1
希望大家有空可以幫我看一下然後給點意見好嗎謝謝
因為我第一次寫小說所以不是那麼好 。
8 years ago
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貓繪子
#2
我也15啊~~找到同齡的!!
8 years ago
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雨
@貓繪子, 很高興認識你哦哈哈哈
8 years ago
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貓繪子
#3
我剛剛去看妳的作品
我不知道妳是不是故意這麼寫喇
但是對我來說節奏太快了點
8 years ago
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雨
@貓繪子, 節奏快是什麼意思??
8 years ago
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貓繪子
@雨, 可能是故事進展太快 沒有描述到細節
8 years ago
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小圓
#6
加油!:)
8 years ago
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雨
@想進化去的ET, 謝謝你哦<3
8 years ago
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律希
#7
嗚啊~這邊也是同齡的。然後可能是因為劇情太快的關係,所以角色的性格特徵方面不太明顯。
一起加油吧!
8 years ago
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雨
@律希, 好專業哈哈看來我得加把勁囉
8 years ago
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奈梨
#8
文筆稍微白話了一點!感覺有些地方的描述會讓人出戲w不過新手寫這樣已經超強了!加油喔!
8 years ago
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雨
@奈梨, 謝謝你哦 覺得會寫小說的人超厲害
8 years ago
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XIA
#9
妳好我是老夏 多多指教摟
我的作品 榮耀之路之法神 剛更完(累癱
8 years ago
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智炫
#10
我都想有人評一評我的作品。歡迎大家給我意見
8 years ago
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石異
#11
這裡也是15歲哈哈( 舉手
寫的很好呢! 不過我也覺得多加點角色的想法或細解會更好喔~
加油吧,也歡迎給我的小說一點意見xd
8 years ago
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夏沫
#12
我是14歲呢...今天剛下載這個app的~~
8 years ago
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因為我第一次寫小說所以不是那麼好 。
我不知道妳是不是故意這麼寫喇
但是對我來說節奏太快了點
一起加油吧!
我的作品 榮耀之路之法神 剛更完(累癱
寫的很好呢! 不過我也覺得多加點角色的想法或細解會更好喔~
加油吧,也歡迎給我的小說一點意見xd