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請幫忙評論!
季痕
#1
我是新手,不知道自己寫的是否很好,可否請各位大大幫忙我看看?如果可以,可以給我一點指教嗎?謝謝!
7 years ago
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十三郎(多媒體廢作人)
#2
粗糙看了一次,未知道角色及作者想怎樣去走這個故事,
角色中除了一、兩句的情緒及反應外,也不知道他們的動機,
似是劇情需要便做下一個動作。
不知道你明唔明白我以上的說話,因為要評論別人的作品一點也不容易,所以我也用了很多時間來思想組織。
希望幫到你。
7 years ago
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季痕
@十三郎寫作團隊, 十分感謝,肯看我就已經很開心了!你的建議我會盡量的修改,謝謝!
7 years ago
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角色中除了一、兩句的情緒及反應外,也不知道他們的動機,
似是劇情需要便做下一個動作。
不知道你明唔明白我以上的說話,因為要評論別人的作品一點也不容易,所以我也用了很多時間來思想組織。
希望幫到你。