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番茄炒蛋
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嘿,大家好!《樱尼尔来》已经更新到第10章啦,但评论区的冷清让我有点心慌慌😅。
可能是我的写作还不够好,所以才没人留言吧?希望能听到你们的意见!
如果你看过的话,能不能帮我看看:
• 哪些部分写得拖沓或让人看不懂?
• 人物是不是有点“僵硬”?
• 故事情节或设定,哪里让你觉得迷惑或难以接受?
• 整体节奏快慢如何,哪里可能出戏?
我才刚开始写,真心希望能收到大家的建议!不怕被指出错误,就怕没有反馈,毕竟我还在不断摸索中!
欢迎随便吐槽或者给点建议,能帮我进步,我会非常感激的~🙏
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番茄炒蛋
#11
本喵第3篇加剧情了 如果各位萌新有时间阅读📖
随便留言分享你的想法和感受~🫶🫶🫶🫶🫶谢谢~
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可能是我的写作还不够好,所以才没人留言吧?希望能听到你们的意见!
如果你看过的话,能不能帮我看看:
• 哪些部分写得拖沓或让人看不懂?
• 人物是不是有点“僵硬”?
• 故事情节或设定,哪里让你觉得迷惑或难以接受?
• 整体节奏快慢如何,哪里可能出戏?
我才刚开始写,真心希望能收到大家的建议!不怕被指出错误,就怕没有反馈,毕竟我还在不断摸索中!
欢迎随便吐槽或者给点建议,能帮我进步,我会非常感激的~🙏
随便留言分享你的想法和感受~🫶🫶🫶🫶🫶谢谢~