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朱諾(Juno)
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嗯……扯到宗教就是一個很麻煩的事,因為作者給我感覺不了解基督教
首先,不是純潔的心靈會得到庇護,教會是罪人的醫院。為什麼會信基督教?就是因為基督徒覺得自己有罪,生命需要耶穌,不代表基督徒是完美的,即便信了之後也不是
然後,假設他們都是基督徒。那麼生命是上帝賦予的,所以時間是掌握在上帝手中。如果因此而不信,嗯,小信的行為
可能會質疑、信心動搖,的確有可能而不信,但這個情感的轉折絕對絕對非常複雜,作者並沒有堆疊出來
應該說做為一個以心裡刻畫為賣點的小說,情感太單一了,這樣並不真實,而加入宗教元素無疑是扣分的
這種題材本來就難發揮,而正面描寫只會暴露缺點。有些地方e.g.還不是結局之類的描述,不是正式小說會出現的東西。不過文筆有進步
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首先,不是純潔的心靈會得到庇護,教會是罪人的醫院。為什麼會信基督教?就是因為基督徒覺得自己有罪,生命需要耶穌,不代表基督徒是完美的,即便信了之後也不是
然後,假設他們都是基督徒。那麼生命是上帝賦予的,所以時間是掌握在上帝手中。如果因此而不信,嗯,小信的行為
可能會質疑、信心動搖,的確有可能而不信,但這個情感的轉折絕對絕對非常複雜,作者並沒有堆疊出來
應該說做為一個以心裡刻畫為賣點的小說,情感太單一了,這樣並不真實,而加入宗教元素無疑是扣分的
這種題材本來就難發揮,而正面描寫只會暴露缺點。有些地方e.g.還不是結局之類的描述,不是正式小說會出現的東西。不過文筆有進步