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筆言
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可以嘗試抽取角色最強烈的印象出來,再加以描述和比喻。
站在出口處等待著我的,是玲奈前輩。她今天配穿著冷衫牛仔褲的韓風組合,和平時的日系形象錯開了,使我霎時有點錯愕。不過,雖則女人是善變的動物,但在玲奈身上有著唯一不變的地方,那便是她那朝氣得戚的氣埸和笑容。
在我打量她一身的新造型的同時,玲奈在我面前轉了兩圈,展示她的窄身牛仔褲和寬鬆冷衫造型。「你看看,今天我有什麼不同!」她握著袖子,雙眼發光般向我問道。
不用刻意在外表的描述,光是寫她的行為,你也你大概想像到她的樣子。
「朝氣得戚」是這段人物性格的表現,這裡每一個字詞,都是圍繞著這個觀點,而你也可以透過不斷練習,將這個寫作觸覺,練成本能,到時,你隨手也能寫出角色了。
打個廣告,以上段落出自《少年編輯事件簿》:penana.com/story/28168/%E5%B0%91%E5%B9%B4%E7%B7%A8%E8%BC%AF%E4%BA%8B%E4%BB%B6%E7%B0%BF/issue/5
6 years ago
莫妮
@筆言, 你這個描述手法很讚。可以側面描寫角色,使到讀者從角色的行為上了解到角色的性格、個人特點等等。
6 years ago
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站在出口處等待著我的,是玲奈前輩。她今天配穿著冷衫牛仔褲的韓風組合,和平時的日系形象錯開了,使我霎時有點錯愕。不過,雖則女人是善變的動物,但在玲奈身上有著唯一不變的地方,那便是她那朝氣得戚的氣埸和笑容。
在我打量她一身的新造型的同時,玲奈在我面前轉了兩圈,展示她的窄身牛仔褲和寬鬆冷衫造型。「你看看,今天我有什麼不同!」她握著袖子,雙眼發光般向我問道。
不用刻意在外表的描述,光是寫她的行為,你也你大概想像到她的樣子。
「朝氣得戚」是這段人物性格的表現,這裡每一個字詞,都是圍繞著這個觀點,而你也可以透過不斷練習,將這個寫作觸覺,練成本能,到時,你隨手也能寫出角色了。
打個廣告,以上段落出自《少年編輯事件簿》:penana.com/story/28168/%E5%B0%91%E5%B9%B4%E7%B7%A8%E8%BC%AF%E4%BA%8B%E4%BB%B6%E7%B0%BF/issue/5