/society.php?id=223&action=replysocpost&i=14469&c=93663&o=41471&parent_id=93663
寫作交流討論 | Penana
arrow_back
寫作交流討論
Login
Cancel
Search stories, writers or societies
Show More Tags
Continue Reading
Clear All
More
What Others Are Reading
Refresh
See more results for "
"
X
Never miss what's happening on Penana!
Turn on notifications
Later
Info
Discussion
Members
寫作程度很像小學生
Join the society to participate in the discussion!
不眠草
#7
其實我覺得寫的並不差,也沒有小學生文筆的感覺喔
我拜讀的作品是《雪的溫度》
或者你可以提出你覺得比較有問題的作品
會比較能夠貼合你的你疑問給出一些想法
整體來說我覺得內容沒有太大的問題
大約四年前曾在作文補習班看過國中生的作文
石苫籽的文筆我覺得相比起來流暢很多了😌
閱讀起來可以很快的看過去,不會有太多停頓的地方
我覺得已經具備了很好的說故事能力
如果想要更精進的話
建議可以多練習抽換詞面,增加詞彙量
有些甚至在一個段落出現了多次
除了寫作當下不易察覺,事後潤稿時也可以留意
2 years ago
石苫籽
我因為是問同人文,所以我在EP又一本正在連載的同人文,因為是AU所以沒有看過原作是可以看的,可以私訊你嗎?
2 years ago
不眠草
@石苫籽, 可以唷,但可能能力有限,請多包涵
2 years ago
石苫籽
@刺球與不眠草, 那謝謝,不過因為還在連載,我不太想要先被意見影響到我的寫作方式,可以等我連載完再讓你一次看完嗎>"<不好意思,而且這似乎還要很久
2 years ago
不眠草
@石苫籽, 那等你想到再傳給我吧,如果我有看到我就會看
2 years ago
石苫籽
@刺球與不眠草, 好喔謝謝
2 years ago
< Back
×
Subscribe
Go to the magazine
/
+ Add tip
The tip will be charged every payment period
+ Add promotion code
Apply
close
Recipient Name
Shipping address
Phone Number
I prefer
not to receive
the physical benefits.
JOIN
Pay with
xxxx xxxx xxxx
Update payment method
This is a one-time purchase.
If you don't cancel before the trial ends, you will automatically be charged the subscription fee every
until you cancel.
Renews automatically every
, unless you decide to cancel. You can cancel your subscription at any time.
You can pay with non-card methods if you subscribe for
12 months
.
Please leave your contact phone number here..
We will reach you soon by Whatsapp at the tel number you provide.
SUBMIT
Please enter phone number.
Credit card payment
You have subscribed to this plan already!
Manage subscriptions
X
×
People Who Like This
x
Proceed
0
will be deducted for this action.
Your current coin balance:
0
(
Click to buy coins
)
Confirm
Cancel
arrow_back
×
×
Send
send
×
Install this webapp for easier offline reading: tap
and then Add to home screen.
X
REGISTER
LOGIN
account_circle
email
vpn_key
I have read, understand, and agree to the Penana
Terms of Service
.
JOIN
email
vpn_key
Remember Me
LOGIN
Forgot Password?
OR
Login with Facebook
我拜讀的作品是《雪的溫度》
或者你可以提出你覺得比較有問題的作品
會比較能夠貼合你的你疑問給出一些想法
整體來說我覺得內容沒有太大的問題
大約四年前曾在作文補習班看過國中生的作文
石苫籽的文筆我覺得相比起來流暢很多了😌
閱讀起來可以很快的看過去,不會有太多停頓的地方
我覺得已經具備了很好的說故事能力
如果想要更精進的話
建議可以多練習抽換詞面,增加詞彙量
有些甚至在一個段落出現了多次
除了寫作當下不易察覺,事後潤稿時也可以留意