I love your description. It's not excessive, but it flows well. I think your characters are all really interesting. I like that Lirare didn't immediately lash out at Roark because of the history between them, and they have a really interesting dynamic together.
The only thing I would suggest that you pay extra special attention to is how you punctuate your dialogue. It's not outrageously wrong, but it could use a bit of work. Other than that, consider me a fan of this story. :)
Thank you so much! And I really appreciate your revision suggestions, thank you so much for taking the time to do that! That was so nice of you! I will keep my dialogue in mind when I write!
The only thing I would suggest that you pay extra special attention to is how you punctuate your dialogue. It's not outrageously wrong, but it could use a bit of work. Other than that, consider me a fan of this story. :)