The way you write your first chapter is very good. The tenor of your chapter makes me think of the author Joan Lowery Nixon. I don't know if you know her but you do have similarities.
You have some issues with your tenses, and subject-verb agreements here and there, though. However, it doesn't affect the entirety of the chapter.
One of the things I like too is that I definitely felt the mystery of the mansion exuding from this. I do wish that you gave more description of the mansion and its surroundings to give off that distinct, tangible feel to it. But, no worries, I surely felt the thrill.
Sorry for my comments, but I'm hoping to read your next chapter. Kudos!
I had forgotten about Joan Lowery Nixon, but she was more well known when I was younger. I was a little young for her stories when I was little. But I took a look at a sample of her writing and can definitely see what you mean. :) Thanks for reading and commenting :)
You have some issues with your tenses, and subject-verb agreements here and there, though. However, it doesn't affect the entirety of the chapter.
One of the things I like too is that I definitely felt the mystery of the mansion exuding from this. I do wish that you gave more description of the mansion and its surroundings to give off that distinct, tangible feel to it. But, no worries, I surely felt the thrill.
Sorry for my comments, but I'm hoping to read your next chapter. Kudos!