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SparkleCadet

I like the concept. The plot is pretty good so far and like that your story give room for the readers to make preditions like many good stories. It give the audience something to look forward to and thats a great quailty that any story should have. However there are a few things that i have to point out. #1 who's point of view is the story in? First person or thrid? And secondly if your going to name your chapters, you dont have to put chapter 2 e.c.t. Once you stated that this chapters your prolodge you dont have to keep taps on it. Just write the name of the chapters unless its a specail chapter. Overall its a good story so far.

4 years ago

Bethany Joy Swaney

I’m glad you mostly like what you’ve read so far. Thank you for your input as well.
For now the chapter in front of the name of each chapter are place holders. That’s the only reason why it’s that way. As I’m experimenting with a new style of book.
In the record keepers point of view it’s supposed to be first person because it’s him in current times.
Each chapter is a piece from her diary, so it’s past tense. Which is why it’s written in third person.
Again I’m still figuring this all out. That’s why this has been such a long process so far. I know it’s not common to mix view points in books, but I have a purpose for it. That’s why I’m having people read it so I can try to make the proper adjustments to achieve what I’m trying to do with proper transitions. However, I also don’t want to confuse the reader. So there are many, many edits to come.

4 years ago

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