This was simple but very grounded. The introduction of characters were smooth and the inciting incident was paced well. It's a great start. I hope the angry guy has more role later on in the story.
Edit: Oh he's probably going to be the "romance" aspect of this story?
Thank you! The guy does have a role in the story and I think that aspect would be a little too telling by now since he's already appeared in the next few chapters. I suppose we'll just have to see how the story unravels :)
Edit: Oh he's probably going to be the "romance" aspect of this story?