I love how it feels like I'm ready poetry, not prose. An interesting choice to use only lower case as well, it adds to the poetic feel, very ee cummings
Thank you so much! I'm glad you feel like it's more poetry than prose because I really tried to work on a more lyrical style for this story. I also really love lowercase, but to be honest I'd never heard of e e cummings before you mentioned him, and I'm glad you did! He's a very interesting poet. :)