You make great use of short, fast-paced sentences. You also provide just enough information in the introduction that makes the reader want to keep reading. It's not too much, yet not too little. It's just enough. This story is written with a confidence that you know where it's going, and the reader has to trust you along this journey.
This story is written with a confidence that you know where it's going, and the reader has to trust you along this journey.
Keep writing!