A very good start at fanfiction. :) There are some verb tense issues that can be easily fixed with some editing. Gaara in general appears to be slightly OOC, which isn't exactly a problem, but it pushes some readers away. Ino looks to be very in-character, so tweaking with her shouldn't be necessary. :) All in all, a few tweaks here and there should make this a finished one-shot! :)
Thank you for the feedback! ^_^ I wasn't exactly sure because I thought writing a fanfiction means you could tweak the characters to your liking. Was that not how it's supposed to be? :o
@Emoddess, That's sorta how it's supposed to be, though I think most readers have in mind that the plot of the story is original and not entirely the characters. The definition of a fanfiction will vary depending on who you ask...Personally, I prefer characters who remain as close to canon as possible, but that's just my preference. :) I still liked the story!
I wasn't exactly sure because I thought writing a fanfiction means you could tweak the characters to your liking. Was that not how it's supposed to be? :o