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Ramen Noodles
I am still enjoying the progress of the story and anything I have to say has already been said in my first review in regards to descriptions, pace, and length. Although externally the story feels narrow in what the reader can see currently, internally the bigger picture of our MC gets wider. I also noticed in regards to punctuation of dialogue some errors, but that is an editing issue and not a story one. The question posed at the end of this chapter. Are you an Angel striked me is very interesting because of the meaning that one sentence could hold for this story. Is our MC truly as good as she originally appeared to be and innocent? Is anybody? I hope to see more of this story's potential fleshed out!
8 年前
madwoman-with-a-pen
Thank you!! I'm so happy that you're enjoying my story. I'll be sure to read over and edit the next chapter before I post it :)
8 年前
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