A lovely little story. With some editing on the plot and characters (refer back to my suggestions on previous chapters for this) I believe this story can become even better. As a final note for you, I suggest reading through it and tying up all loose ends as Saberwolf has suggested. This will make the story appear more concise and put together. Anyway, it was a pleasure to read and I hope to see more work from you in the future!
Anyways, I want to read your story too. I have to find out the ending of the story. Ahaha. Can't stop before I finish what I started.