I really am hooked on your story. A great Christian story that I really relate to. You really capture the college experience. One edit: When you say, "Chill out, Brenda," you kind of get redundant when Gee Kay says said and spoke up. Maybe just put one or the other. I agree with the previous commenter about her view of America, and I love your introduction to Indonesian culture. I really enjoy the story and Cynthia's faith. Gee Kay seems like such a gentleman; I would totally adore him in real life. Maybe you could give a description of him haha, if you did not previously. I am going to read back to see if you did because I do not have a picture of him in my head. I really hope you publish this book someday; I will definitely buy it, so let me know when it is in print :)
@Miss Anderson, So I edited the redundant part and added a description of Gee Kay and will do the Indonesian-American difference in Cynthia's perspective. Thanks a lot for the explanation. You are really an author!! HAHAHA.
Anyways, I wrote this story years ago tbh. So with the help of you and all friends of mine here, I realized now that this certainly need to be read over and edited. Hoho.
About the culture difference, what do you suggest for me to add there? Like what should I describe more?
And, haha, my my. You're right. I didn't describe how Gee Kay looks like. Will definitely add it.
I am hoping to print this out. Yes, I will. As soon as I am ready to publish this, since this is a Christian book. I guess I need to pray a lot.
Anyways, I wrote this story years ago tbh. So with the help of you and all friends of mine here, I realized now that this certainly need to be read over and edited. Hoho.