Okay, so I've picked up from Chapter 28 until now and throughout the chapters, it has been pretty intense and there are sensitive things as well that makes one think wow or just take a breath after reading a chapter and think for a bit.
But there's also the sweet ones. I think you're really good in creating scenes and describing things that makes it easier to pull the reader's emotions (atleast I can say it's me and I was tearing up and almost crying at some parts at almost three in the morning here). I like how things are starting to shine through the cloudy sky with James starting to be honest with himself and everyone else. While everyone have their own stuff to deal and all, I think the most noticeable and drastic change happened with Christy.
At some point, while I was reading through the chapters, I wondered if Paige, Christy and Selah as well as the most of them were going to patch things up in some way or another and I see you made that happened a little bit with the things in this chapter and the previous ones. It's refreshing to see a change in her life, especially since she's been through some really messed up things.
I think I've had my fair share of smiling, chuckling and sniffling throughout the journey of reading the story so I'd say you did a great job in drawing the emotions out. I hope Christy is getting better and that things are starting to look up for them. One thing though, I was just wondering if James or Vargas are supposed to be James', not James's? It's something that I noticed a little bit. :)
Hey omg thank you so much for reading!!! Sorry but I probably won't get back to continuing the story until a while from now... maybe I'll finish during my winter break? It's just that school and life in general have been making me a busy bee! oh and as for the james thing, I looked it up and it can be both James's and James'. Again thank you so much!! It's nice to see that I'm not posting the book online for no one to read lol
@Nocturne, Hey, it's no problem. And I see, I guess I was kinda confused about those two things because I normally lean towards the (s') thingy instead of the other way round. And yeah, no worries I saw your author's note about being busy and stuff so I get it and take your time :D
But there's also the sweet ones. I think you're really good in creating scenes and describing things that makes it easier to pull the reader's emotions (atleast I can say it's me and I was tearing up and almost crying at some parts at almost three in the morning here). I like how things are starting to shine through the cloudy sky with James starting to be honest with himself and everyone else. While everyone have their own stuff to deal and all, I think the most noticeable and drastic change happened with Christy.
At some point, while I was reading through the chapters, I wondered if Paige, Christy and Selah as well as the most of them were going to patch things up in some way or another and I see you made that happened a little bit with the things in this chapter and the previous ones. It's refreshing to see a change in her life, especially since she's been through some really messed up things.
I think I've had my fair share of smiling, chuckling and sniffling throughout the journey of reading the story so I'd say you did a great job in drawing the emotions out. I hope Christy is getting better and that things are starting to look up for them. One thing though,
I was just wondering if James or Vargas are supposed to be James', not James's? It's something that I noticed a little bit. :)
oh and as for the james thing, I looked it up and it can be both James's and James'.
Again thank you so much!! It's nice to see that I'm not posting the book online for no one to read lol