1: I love how the chapter is called: "Chapter First" instead of "Chapter One" I don't know why, but it just adds some humor to it.
2: I love the amount of detail already, even in just the first paragraph! "Each step resounded beneath him with a crunch, as the rain drizzled down in pizzicato notes on the glassy puddles below." It's just like: DAYUM
3: Glass rain? That's gotta hurt without this dude's armor lmao
4: God, I just love this worldbuilding. The glass dunes, the different text for the archdemon Aqnyzus, and even what I'm guessing is the telling the protagonist what to do is just...*chef's kiss* immaculate
5: D&D? The dice to attack just sounds so cool.
6: Love the probability Isaac uses to try to figure out how to attack Aqnyzus, then he's just like, "Eh, I'll take my chances with radiant."
7: Of course, the VR player gets hot and is done for the day. Granted, I've never played VR, but my brother jumps around when he plays on the Xbox a lot, and ends up getting quite the workout from it.
8: Ooh...russet...hey, I've heard that word before...oh yeah, that's right! Uncommon name for a color let's go!!!!
9: "...to the way he ate pizza was contrary to the norm." Don't tell me this guy eats pizza crust first!
10: "...turning his life into a string of convoluted rituals and processes, all in the subconscious aim of categorically doing everything the 'right' way." Sounds an awful lot like my dad and brother.
Ah! I ran out of time I gotta go somewhere soon but I will read more and comment more about this later!
@ItsAmelia Aw, thanks for the comment and the read :D
I actually took the "Chapter First" idea from Frank Baum, and his novel "The Life and Adventures of Santa Claus", which really influenced me as a kid. I dunno why, but I really loved the way he titled his chapters, and it stuck with me these years XD
And yeah, definitely took a lot of inspiration from D&D. I play 4E tho, so I'm something of a black sheep :P
...And Isaac and I may, in fact, both eat our pizza crust-first.
Don't crucify me yet, there's a good reason! I always save the best part of my meal for last, the choicest bits and my favourite parts, so for a pizza, it makes sense to start with the crust, which is undeniably the lamest part of the food, and work your way to the center (with a piece of every topping stacked on the last bite)
@Cheeto, Also, thanks Cheeto! :) and yup, you're definitely allowed to be proud of BRYZ, you're the one that's been single-handedly fixing my grammer and tweaking my character interactions XD
@Cheeto, are we talking throwing whole pineapples, or putting pieces of pineapple on my pizza? ... Because I'm one of the pineapple on pizza crowd too XD
(Plz no cursed BRYZ fanart tho X'D I'm already dreading the day someone R34s my poor characters)
@ItsAmelia, I have no idea why this phenomenon seems to center around me, but I'd definitely believe that by the time BRYZ ends, the comment count will be well into the thousands :3
1: I love how the chapter is called: "Chapter First" instead of "Chapter One" I don't know why, but it just adds some humor to it.
2: I love the amount of detail already, even in just the first paragraph! "Each step resounded beneath him with a crunch, as the rain drizzled down in pizzicato notes on the glassy puddles below." It's just like: DAYUM
3: Glass rain? That's gotta hurt without this dude's armor lmao
4: God, I just love this worldbuilding. The glass dunes, the different text for the archdemon Aqnyzus, and even what I'm guessing is the telling the protagonist what to do is just...*chef's kiss* immaculate
5: D&D? The dice to attack just sounds so cool.
6: Love the probability Isaac uses to try to figure out how to attack Aqnyzus, then he's just like, "Eh, I'll take my chances with radiant."
7: Of course, the VR player gets hot and is done for the day. Granted, I've never played VR, but my brother jumps around when he plays on the Xbox a lot, and ends up getting quite the workout from it.
8: Ooh...russet...hey, I've heard that word before...oh yeah, that's right! Uncommon name for a color let's go!!!!
9: "...to the way he ate pizza was contrary to the norm." Don't tell me this guy eats pizza crust first!
10: "...turning his life into a string of convoluted rituals and processes, all in the subconscious aim of categorically doing everything the 'right' way." Sounds an awful lot like my dad and brother.
Ah! I ran out of time I gotta go somewhere soon but I will read more and comment more about this later!
I actually took the "Chapter First" idea from Frank Baum, and his novel "The Life and Adventures of Santa Claus", which really influenced me as a kid. I dunno why, but I really loved the way he titled his chapters, and it stuck with me these years XD
And yeah, definitely took a lot of inspiration from D&D. I play 4E tho, so I'm something of a black sheep :P
...And Isaac and I may, in fact, both eat our pizza crust-first.
Don't crucify me yet, there's a good reason! I always save the best part of my meal for last, the choicest bits and my favourite parts, so for a pizza, it makes sense to start with the crust, which is undeniably the lamest part of the food, and work your way to the center (with a piece of every topping stacked on the last bite)
...I'mma run away now before I get ganged on.
Just for that, if we ever meet up, I'm gonna aggressively eat pizza backwards in front of you XD
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Because I'm one of the pineapple on pizza crowd too XD
(Plz no cursed BRYZ fanart tho X'D I'm already dreading the day someone R34s my poor characters)
And that's good. But also bad. Blursed, I guess.
What have I unintentionally started this time...