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RampantStrawberry
Good chapter! I suggested some edits, mostly clean ups, but there was nothing major. Is this story told in past tense? Also, you kinda lost me from where they landed and then they found an important looking person? Are they in a town by now? I was kinda confused ngl haha. I liked how Grá is getting closer to Terek, and how he was worried for him. :>
Kaleb finn
Yup will do, thanks.
RampantStrawberry
@Kaleb finn, i had some questions-
Kaleb finn
@RampantStrawberry, yes sorry in a bit tired. I dodnt intend to to write it in past tense. Grá walked put of the ship, looked around and found the persob with the most badges. And finally the gang made their way into the city, reached the Old Tree and was ambushed. Did that clear things up?
RampantStrawberry
@Kaleb finn, alright. yeah it did thanks
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