Ok so. If I don't get around to finishing a chapter for my story that you liked tonight, its because I just binge read this WHOLE DARN THING. IN A SITTING. I cranked through a half a bag of chips and two bowls of salsa. Not even kidding. So your character development is FLAWLESS. I feel like I know all three of them so very well and feel very strongly about each of them. Honestly, I love Rick the most. He is a good man, solid, loyal and honest. Seriously, hes like the perfect guy...sans the teenage alcoholism thing, you know. I've known girls just like Nova and they were fun to go out with on a weekend night in college but I kept them at an arms length as far as legitimate friendship went. I feel bad for her but seriously, I just want to slap her sometimes. Way too manipulative for my tastes. And how she flounces around like she thinks shes too cute to boot.... ugh. I want to cuff her and be like, "Stop pretending you're a Kardashian and get it together! You're a reasonable intelligent girl with a healthy body, FULFILL YOUR POTENTIAL and stop being a lush." A seriously well written character. That's probably why she elicits such strong feelings for me. And Puck....poor poor Puck. He's just a whole heap of mess, bless his heart. But he seriously needs to stop whining. So the girl isn't into you the way you want? Too bad. Fish or cut bait, sugar britches. But he's not that bad all the time. He just needs to watch some PSAs on peer pressure. All in all, you need to edit this sucker and get it to a publisher. Seriously. Amazing.
Best. Review. Ever. Thank you so much for giving these three your time! Hopefully I'll have the "complete" first draft out by the end of the week--I'm writing 5-6 hours a night... stay tuned!Seriously, love to read reviews like this. It keeps me going!
So your character development is FLAWLESS. I feel like I know all three of them so very well and feel very strongly about each of them. Honestly, I love Rick the most. He is a good man, solid, loyal and honest. Seriously, hes like the perfect guy...sans the teenage alcoholism thing, you know.
I've known girls just like Nova and they were fun to go out with on a weekend night in college but I kept them at an arms length as far as legitimate friendship went. I feel bad for her but seriously, I just want to slap her sometimes. Way too manipulative for my tastes. And how she flounces around like she thinks shes too cute to boot.... ugh. I want to cuff her and be like, "Stop pretending you're a Kardashian and get it together! You're a reasonable intelligent girl with a healthy body, FULFILL YOUR POTENTIAL and stop being a lush." A seriously well written character. That's probably why she elicits such strong feelings for me.
And Puck....poor poor Puck. He's just a whole heap of mess, bless his heart. But he seriously needs to stop whining. So the girl isn't into you the way you want? Too bad. Fish or cut bait, sugar britches. But he's not that bad all the time. He just needs to watch some PSAs on peer pressure.
All in all, you need to edit this sucker and get it to a publisher. Seriously. Amazing.