I loved this. As much as I was rooting for the children to make it, I could only assume this was not going to end well. I wasnt expecting a 2 for 2 based off the earlier sabotage but then for it not to be the sniper's rifle?
Truly unfortunate.
From a grammatical standpoint, your flow was relatively smooth. Some sentences were clipped but I think they may have been for stylistic purposes. I did note that one of your words should have been an adverb as well but, other than that, everything was pretty good.
Thanks so much for reading! I appreciate the review and feedback ^^
I just checked, and it doesn't seem like this contest allows for suggested edits, but if you do see anything that needs fixing, don't hesitate to comment/message me. I'll give it another once-over to try and find that missing adverb, though.
I loved this. As much as I was rooting for the children to make it, I could only assume this was not going to end well. I wasnt expecting a 2 for 2 based off the earlier sabotage but then for it not to be the sniper's rifle?
Truly unfortunate.
From a grammatical standpoint, your flow was relatively smooth. Some sentences were clipped but I think they may have been for stylistic purposes. I did note that one of your words should have been an adverb as well but, other than that, everything was pretty good.
Well done.
v/r
Tenshi
I just checked, and it doesn't seem like this contest allows for suggested edits, but if you do see anything that needs fixing, don't hesitate to comment/message me. I'll give it another once-over to try and find that missing adverb, though.