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芝沫
細節不足導致讀者難以想像場景，因為角色的心境缺乏描寫（為何他會這樣想？有什麼感受？），人物形象較為扁平，環境的描述可增加更多（例如：賽道、活塞山的內部細節）

以上是我觀察得出來的建議
2 years ago
勝雲
好，謝謝
2 years ago
勝雲
我再研究看看
2 years ago
芝沫
@Tiffany , 加油
2 years ago
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