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夜臨
女主角拉著男主角不想放手的那一幕，或許可以再補上一點描述。例如，描述女主角的表情、眼神，以及男主角的疑惑，還有男主角的想法等等，這樣感覺會更完整一點。

另外，全部的傭人都在勸男主角趕快回家這點很好笑ＸＤ
9 months ago
泗楓
好！謝謝妳的建議，我找時間再做修改！
9 months ago
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