At first, I thought that perhaps you dropped the electro-shock bombshell too soon, but then you followed it with this chapter. This is the best chapter I've read in this story thus far. The imagery in the 'dream-sequence' is great but more than anything I love the transition back to reality. It's so smooth and subtle. I know you've taken a break on this story, but I hope you come back to it.
This is one of those parts that I'm going to really add more imagery on as it is the shortest chapter (but I personally liked not having too much words for this because that would dilute the dream sequence) And thank you so much! I try to visualize the stories how I would watch it if it were a movie. This is great input and I would try to keep the transitions as smooth as this one. I'm currently done with my second script work so I'll have more time for this! I'll be reading yours when I get the time! :)